tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3615675676021392217.post7294043178927890030..comments2024-03-28T08:14:28.881-04:00Comments on Authoress: 122 Psychological DramaAuthoresshttp://www.blogger.com/profile/09223228949688667517noreply@blogger.comBlogger10125tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3615675676021392217.post-25165213262448146802010-03-30T07:00:45.144-04:002010-03-30T07:00:45.144-04:00The mention of red lights and sailors had me think...The mention of red lights and sailors had me thinking something a bit different. Ahem. <br /><br />Based on this, I'm not hooked, but of course I wouldn't normally dismiss a piece after only reading 25 words.Bronhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/13029635239132926178noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3615675676021392217.post-40659481038221319762010-03-26T21:09:12.241-04:002010-03-26T21:09:12.241-04:00I kinda liked the lighthouse simile.I kinda liked the lighthouse simile.Rebecca T.https://www.blogger.com/profile/11994380364321336824noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3615675676021392217.post-14615936733453211142010-03-26T20:48:03.605-04:002010-03-26T20:48:03.605-04:00Not hooked, sorry.Not hooked, sorry.Merchttps://www.blogger.com/profile/14164221022350926808noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3615675676021392217.post-54433908663948018342010-03-26T06:25:44.255-04:002010-03-26T06:25:44.255-04:00Not hooked.Not hooked.Jodi Meadowshttps://www.blogger.com/profile/11796496740054225283noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3615675676021392217.post-78391741776143701222010-03-26T00:55:49.966-04:002010-03-26T00:55:49.966-04:00I think people aren't liking the cliche approa...I think people aren't liking the cliche approach because the two sentences really can be made shorter and more dramatic.<br /><br />***** raced towards the flashing red lights. <br /><br />You really don't need anything else to draw you into the story. Like a newspaper headline. It's a raw punchy way to say "Man Bites Dog"Anonymousnoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3615675676021392217.post-29368092767190600982010-03-25T23:27:22.073-04:002010-03-25T23:27:22.073-04:00Not hooked, mainly because of the lighthouse simil...Not hooked, mainly because of the lighthouse simile. Red flashing lights make for a vivid enough scene without inserting a totally different picture into things.Stellanoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3615675676021392217.post-41343249546879062492010-03-25T18:58:23.083-04:002010-03-25T18:58:23.083-04:00I agree, I don't like the first sentenceI agree, I don't like the first sentenceMeghan S.https://www.blogger.com/profile/12447149254455271636noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3615675676021392217.post-24945707076908002722010-03-25T18:53:11.082-04:002010-03-25T18:53:11.082-04:00Sorry... I'm not hooked yet. I just am not tha...Sorry... I'm not hooked yet. I just am not that crazy about the "like a lighthouse to a lost sailor".Cate Kariaxihttps://www.blogger.com/profile/01812494549402252779noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3615675676021392217.post-665382748851085372010-03-25T18:12:55.056-04:002010-03-25T18:12:55.056-04:00It's not bad writing, and I wouldn't shut ...It's not bad writing, and I wouldn't shut the book just after those words, but maybe the simile is a little much? There are so many stories that begin with chaos and police lights, what's the single sharp detail that makes this one stand out?Bethany Elizabethhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/12829932931010851406noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3615675676021392217.post-81274252607787437372010-03-25T17:10:11.418-04:002010-03-25T17:10:11.418-04:00Not hooked. Way to cliche in the first line.Not hooked. Way to cliche in the first line.Anonymousnoreply@blogger.com