tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3615675676021392217.post7401651197465834914..comments2024-03-28T08:14:28.881-04:00Comments on Authoress: Are You Hooked? Young Adult #7Authoresshttp://www.blogger.com/profile/09223228949688667517noreply@blogger.comBlogger3125tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3615675676021392217.post-46959765992952813192016-12-15T10:13:41.662-05:002016-12-15T10:13:41.662-05:00I found it hard to get into this because I couldn&...I found it hard to get into this because I couldn't tell if it was real or a dream or what...nothing against the writing because I think it is well done but I don't think I would continue reading. AMYnoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3615675676021392217.post-39618676545026830522016-12-14T14:22:34.206-05:002016-12-14T14:22:34.206-05:00Loved how the page ends, but it took a long time t...Loved how the page ends, but it took a long time to get there, in a way that doesn't feel YA. Also, I was distracted by all the people mentioned. Is Ma, Thea's mom? Who is Other? is it a thing or person? Does Thea know it? Who's Garrett? Is he someone the reader has to know from page one? Anonymoushttps://www.blogger.com/profile/10859703513161420215noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3615675676021392217.post-2749749051945331772016-12-14T10:44:36.381-05:002016-12-14T10:44:36.381-05:00This is interesting, but I think the perspective y...This is interesting, but I think the perspective you've taken to write it out keeps us--the reader--distant from the action. There's also a bit of telling in places that could greatly benefit from showing. Like, "The meaty odor of burning flesh." Describe the smell, make us disgusted by it. Just an idea :)Alinanoreply@blogger.com