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Wednesday, August 24, 2016

Logline Critique Round #15

TITLE: WHAT EYES MAY SEE
GENRE: YA Romance, Magical Realism

When losing control of your emotions could cost the life of anyone nearby, falling in love is a dangerous game.

6 comments:

  1. This is missing all of the specifics. Who is this about? What does he/she want? Why is falling in love an obstacle to this goal?

    Good luck!
    Holly

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  2. I would like to see some reference to magic in your logline.

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  3. This is a tagline. A logline needs a protagonist, a problem, an antagonist, a conflict, and a goal. It also needs to show the genre. What is the magic part of the magic realism?

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  4. It's a good line, interesting and definitely inspiring me to want to read more, but I agree with the comments above - more specifics would push your description from good to great.

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  5. Definitely need more specifics, plus you need to mention the character who we're going to follow over the course of the book.

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  6. We need to know: the character's name, what challenge they face, why they might lose, who is in their way (kind of cool if the love interest is the person in the way).

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