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Wednesday, December 3, 2008

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I got dressed for my first date in 16 years at the same time my ex-husband was across town passing a kidney stone. Divine justice.
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28 comments:

  1. About MeDecember 3, 2008 at 1:42 PM

    Sounds like chick lit, another genre that's not my forte, but I think the hook is interesting and I would at least read more.

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  2. UnknownDecember 3, 2008 at 1:43 PM

    Love this! Funny.

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  3. Casey SomethingDecember 3, 2008 at 2:02 PM

    How fun - I like it. I'd keep reading.

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  4. TerriRainerDecember 3, 2008 at 2:09 PM

    OMG that's FUNNY!

    I would so read on.

    :) Terri

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  5. AnonymousDecember 3, 2008 at 3:01 PM

    I laughed out loud. I want more!

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  6. Michelle D. ArgyleDecember 3, 2008 at 3:19 PM

    I would read on. I like the voice and am interested in both characters already.

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  7. AnonymousDecember 3, 2008 at 3:32 PM

    Absolutely!!!
    I would read on.

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  8. AnonymousDecember 3, 2008 at 3:48 PM

    Not my thing, but I like this. Nice hook. :]

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  9. StephDecember 3, 2008 at 3:49 PM

    Love! It feels fresh. I like chick-lit in small doses of non-clichéd text, but this one gives me a good feeling.

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  10. UnknownDecember 3, 2008 at 4:06 PM

    Fun and hooking.

    The first sentence is a little too long. I'd prefer a few words cut, like:

    "My first date in 16 years and my ex was busy passing a kidney stone."

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  11. Liana BrooksDecember 3, 2008 at 4:50 PM

    Not my genre. Sounds fine though.

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  12. JS BangsDecember 3, 2008 at 5:16 PM

    Awww, snap. I like it and want to keep reading, even though it's not my genre.

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  13. Heather WardellDecember 3, 2008 at 6:02 PM

    This IS my genre and I like this. I might take out the 'across town' part though... who cares where the rotten scoundrel is now? :)

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  14. AnonymousDecember 3, 2008 at 6:51 PM

    Chick Lit is not my choice, ever--but what a great voice.

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  15. Jeannie RueschDecember 3, 2008 at 8:26 PM

    Very fun and engaging. (and such divine justice indeed LOL)

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  16. AnonymousDecember 3, 2008 at 8:42 PM

    Ha! Not my genre, so I wouldn't read on. But that is a great opener.

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  17. UnknownDecember 3, 2008 at 9:21 PM

    LOL! I'd have to read on. The POV character already has my attention. :-)

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  18. AmandaDecember 3, 2008 at 9:57 PM

    Love it! I'd keep reading.

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  19. BethleneDecember 3, 2008 at 11:29 PM

    oh very funny! I'd read on just to see this characters take on things.

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  20. LoriStronginDecember 3, 2008 at 11:50 PM

    Not sure I'm hooked. It feels like there's two POVs going on here, or at least an omniscient POV, but neither serve to really draw me in.

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  21. Hakuna MthathaDecember 4, 2008 at 1:47 AM

    Lovely humour. Would definitely read more.

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  22. Anette J KresDecember 4, 2008 at 9:50 AM

    HAHAHA! I love it. The wry humor is great. I would keep reading. As long as the narrator doesn’t turn completely vindictive and bitchy, I’d be fine. Very nice.

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  23. Kathryn Hupp-HarrisDecember 4, 2008 at 10:58 AM

    I like this. It's funny.

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  24. AnonymousDecember 4, 2008 at 11:53 AM

    Too funny! My favorite entry.

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  25. The Screaming GuppyDecember 4, 2008 at 1:38 PM

    I don't read chick lit, but this seems on target for that genre. Nice job.

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  26. AnonymousDecember 4, 2008 at 7:57 PM

    This sounds familiar.

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  27. AnonymousDecember 5, 2008 at 11:22 AM

    Ha! Love the voice, very funny. I agree that you could do without the ex's whereabouts.

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  28. Carolyn Kaufman | @CMKaufmanDecember 6, 2008 at 12:15 AM

    LOL -- I'd read on.

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