Miss Snark's First Victim
I love the name Ezra...
I get the impression this would need more than 25 words to get started. *laughs* I'd keep reading at this point to see what he hadn't meant to stare at.
Well, for five words it's doing it's job.
Agreed with former comments - at 5 words, I'd keep reading!
I'd like to find out what he's staring at. It's too bad we don't have a full 25 words here.
Not enough info.
I'd keep reading - but I'm dying to see your second sentence, which apparently runs more than 20 words!
Don't like the name. Based on only these 5 words, I'd say not hooked
Not much to go on. Not crazy about the name Ezra, but I could be persuaded if he has a dynamic personality.
I'm curious to know what Ezra stared at, but not full out hooked with so little to go on.
A lot would depend on what Ezra was starting at ... and what would happen to him because he was staring.
Little hooked, but it's not enough.
Maybe hooked. I'd read the next sentence.
I'll keep reading. I'm certainly wondering what Ezra was staring at and why the staring is a bad choice.
Almost hooked--I like the line (and the name) but want just a tiny bit more to draw me in. Probably leaning in favor of hooked, though. :)
I need more to go on.
Doesn't grab me in itself, but I would read one more sentence to see what she's staring at. This format is hard on your opeing :-)
I love the name Ezra...
ReplyDeleteI get the impression this would need more than 25 words to get started. *laughs* I'd keep reading at this point to see what he hadn't meant to stare at.
ReplyDeleteWell, for five words it's doing it's job.
ReplyDeleteAgreed with former comments - at 5 words, I'd keep reading!
ReplyDeleteI'd like to find out what he's staring at. It's too bad we don't have a full 25 words here.
ReplyDeleteNot enough info.
ReplyDeleteI'd keep reading - but I'm dying to see your second sentence, which apparently runs more than 20 words!
ReplyDeleteDon't like the name. Based on only these 5 words, I'd say not hooked
ReplyDeleteNot much to go on. Not crazy about the name Ezra, but I could be persuaded if he has a dynamic personality.
ReplyDeleteI'm curious to know what Ezra stared at, but not full out hooked with so little to go on.
ReplyDeleteA lot would depend on what Ezra was starting at ... and what would happen to him because he was staring.
ReplyDeleteLittle hooked, but it's not enough.
ReplyDeleteMaybe hooked. I'd read the next sentence.
ReplyDeleteI'll keep reading. I'm certainly wondering what Ezra was staring at and why the staring is a bad choice.
ReplyDeleteAlmost hooked--I like the line (and the name) but want just a tiny bit more to draw me in. Probably leaning in favor of hooked, though. :)
ReplyDeleteI need more to go on.
ReplyDeleteDoesn't grab me in itself, but I would read one more sentence to see what she's staring at. This format is hard on your opeing :-)
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