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Thursday, October 6, 2011

Revised Logline Critique Opportunity for Round 1

Good news for Round One logline participants!

Jess Huckins, who blogs HERE, has graciously offered to host your revised loglines on her blog.

If you'd like some feedback on your REVISED logline (as in, you've worked to make it better), please send it to Jess at blogjustjess(at)gmail.com on Friday (tomorrow) between 8AM and 4 PM EDT.  Please format your entry the way you normally would (TITLE: GENRE: [excerpt]).  If Jess receives your logline within the time frame, she will post it that evening.

PLEASE NOTE that this offer is extended to those 40 whose loglines were included in last week's ROUND ONE.

THANKS, Jess! I know this gesture will be greatly appreciated.

9 comments:

  1. What a wonderful opportunity for everyone!

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  2. I will comment on these revised ones too as long as you promise me the following:
    1) Please remember to include some kind of motivation with your goal. It's not enough to say that your character wants X. We need to understand why. Otherwise, the stakes won't make sense.
    2) PLEASE PLEASE PLEASE do not ask any questions in your logline.
    3) Please remember to include an obvious antagonist (person or force). The main character MUST struggle against someone or something, even if it is their own will. Otherwise, you have a goal that is obtainable (which means no tension).
    4) Please make sure that your goal is tangible. This means that readers must be able to recognize when it has been reached. Things like "coming to terms" and "finding justice" aren't really tangible because they are feelings. Things like "putting X behind bars" are tangible.
    5) Please try to put your inciting incident right at the beginning (before or as part of your character setup).
    6) Please take a deep breath before you re-write. I know these things can seem harder to write than the actual novel, but if you really nail it, you will find it helps you maintain a focus for your plot as well.

    See you in cyberspace!
    Holly

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  3. I'm looking forward to seeing everyone's revisions!

    -Jess
    http://justjess.livejournal.com

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  4. Will do Holly. This exercise really helped me write the loglines for my WIPs as well. It's useful to have the crystalized concept even before revisions. And - many thanks to Holly, Authoress Anon & everybody who has generously shared their time.

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  5. Thanks!! Can't wait to see everyone's revised work

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  6. O my! This is so nice of both of you. I've really worked on mine and was really wanting some feedback. It's so hard. Holly, your specific's are very helpful. Very!
    Thanks everyone!

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  7. Jess - you are way awesome to do this. Thank you ^_^

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  8. Thanks! Will definitely participate :D

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