This is a tagline. A logline needs a protagonist, a problem, an antagonist, a conflict, and a goal. It also needs to show the genre. What is the magic part of the magic realism?
It's a good line, interesting and definitely inspiring me to want to read more, but I agree with the comments above - more specifics would push your description from good to great.
We need to know: the character's name, what challenge they face, why they might lose, who is in their way (kind of cool if the love interest is the person in the way).
This is missing all of the specifics. Who is this about? What does he/she want? Why is falling in love an obstacle to this goal?
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Holly
I would like to see some reference to magic in your logline.
ReplyDeleteThis is a tagline. A logline needs a protagonist, a problem, an antagonist, a conflict, and a goal. It also needs to show the genre. What is the magic part of the magic realism?
ReplyDeleteIt's a good line, interesting and definitely inspiring me to want to read more, but I agree with the comments above - more specifics would push your description from good to great.
ReplyDeleteDefinitely need more specifics, plus you need to mention the character who we're going to follow over the course of the book.
ReplyDeleteWe need to know: the character's name, what challenge they face, why they might lose, who is in their way (kind of cool if the love interest is the person in the way).
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