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Thursday, March 29, 2018

10TH BIRTHDAY BLOGPITCH #32 YA Light Fantasy

TITLE: THE BRAVEST OF THEM ALL
GENRE: YA Light Fantasy

As a Maiden, Verabelle is chosen to jump off a cliff and transform into one of the magical guardians of her fairytale land.

But there is no transformation. Only bones and tarnished Maiden brooches litter the shore.
And Verabelle doesn't intend to die.

LITTLE WOMEN meets THE HAZELWOOD + MATCHED
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21 comments:

  1. Carrie HanniganMarch 29, 2018 at 11:58 AM

    Hello,
    Can you please send me your query and the first 100 pages to my email below?
    Thanks!
    Carrie Hannigan
    HSG Agency
    channigan@hsgagency.com

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  2. Pam PhoMarch 29, 2018 at 12:11 PM

    Hi! I'd love too see this. Please use my querymanager link and put Authoress as your referral. Then I'll request from in the system! https://querymanager.com/query/QueryPam

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    1. LoreleiMarch 30, 2018 at 12:44 PM

      Thank you so much! Submission is sent through Query Manager :)

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  3. UnknownMarch 29, 2018 at 2:25 PM

    Love it! Instant tension and stakes, instantly cheering for your heroine not to meet this fate.

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  4. JennybentMarch 29, 2018 at 2:59 PM

    Please send query and first 10 pages to Info@thebentagency.com. Thanks!
    Jenny Bent
    The Bent Agency

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  5. Nicole NowotnikMarch 29, 2018 at 4:20 PM

    Dang. This is super vivid and intense, and given how many requests you've already gotten, it's clear you did an awesome job. Wow.

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    1. LoreleiMarch 30, 2018 at 8:29 AM

      Thank you! I'm so excited to see the positive response!

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  6. UnknownMarch 29, 2018 at 5:31 PM

    Oooh I'd love to read more. Please email your query + 3 chapters + synopsis to lauren@triadaus.com, and include "Birthday Blog Pitch" in the subj line. I look forward to reading!

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  7. shertzMarch 29, 2018 at 6:51 PM

    This is a great pitch - all I want is to know more! Congrats on the requests!

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  8. Michele ThorntonMarch 30, 2018 at 11:08 AM

    Great comps! Good luck!

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  9. Jennifer RofeMarch 30, 2018 at 11:43 AM

    I'd be happy to see a query and the first 10 pages of this. Please follow our submission guidelines at the Andrea Brown Literary Agency website, where you will also find my email. In the subject line, write QUERY: AUTHORESS.

    Jennifer Rofé, Andrea Brown Literary Agency

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  10. Holly BodgerMarch 30, 2018 at 12:35 PM

    Is this only the setup? It reads like your entire novel is her deciding if she should jump or not, and while that is interesting, it's not much of a plot. If you're saying that she DOES jump and it's then that she realizes that she's probably going to die (because of the bones), that's great but I still want to know what happens next.

    Good luck!
    Holly

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    1. LoreleiMarch 30, 2018 at 12:51 PM

      Hi Holly! Thank you so much for the feedback and question. Yes, this is the set up to the first plot point, where its discovered that this entire ritual is built on a lie. The rest of the novel moves forward from there once the pretty fairytale shimmer disappears and the dark underbelly is revealed.

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  11. UnknownMarch 30, 2018 at 4:44 PM

    I have no idea how I missed this on the first read through of entrants.
    However I love it. I like the tension and it's absolutely intriguing to exactly what is going to happen next!!
    Best of luck!

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