TITLE: The Third Strike
GENRE: YA Contemporary
Faking Normal meets Exit, Pursued by a Bear.
Alex has played baseball since 2nd grade. When she makes the high school boys team, team captain Connor sneers. --- Strike 1.
Connor assaults her. --- Strike 2.
Alex doesn’t believe she’s strong enough to testify in court. Then she learns she’s not his first victim. --- Strike 3.
Miss Snark's First Victim
I don't really have any suggestions. It sounds pretty awesome to me. I would read it.
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ReplyDeleteInteresting structure, I like the relevance to the story. Seems timely, also: a girl who plays baseball, also someone standing up for herself against a 'boys club.' I'm hooked.
ReplyDeleteJust a thought, when she learns she's not his first victim, that would be a strike against him, not her, like the first two statements. Maybe the last statement is a ball? Like it's an opportunity to try again?
Thank you, Jen!
ReplyDeleteThis sounds interesting! Please send the query, synopsis and first two chapters to nicole@goldenwheatliterary.com. Thanks!
ReplyDelete-Nicole Payne, Literary Agent at Golden Wheat
Sounds awesome! Please send the query letter and manuscript to queries@ldlainc.com. And include Birthday Blog Pitch in the subject line. Thanks!
ReplyDeleteOh this sounds really cool! I’d love to see the first 50 pages + a synopsis. You can upload everything via QueryManager: QueryMe.online/1005/ABBlogpitch
ReplyDeleteMoe Ferrara
BookEnds Literary
I honestly don't think the tone of this pitch matches the tone of your story. This comes off as light but it's about assault so it shouldn't sound light at all. I also think it would be stronger if you told us more about what happens.
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