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Thursday, March 29, 2018

10TH BIRTHDAY BLOGPITCH #50: YA Thriller

TITLE: Glimmr
GENRE: YA Psychological Thriller

It’s Black Mirror meets Pretty Little Liars when sixteen-year-old Fin Bailey creates Jane, her perfect virtual best friend, and finds out the hard way that things on the internet live forever. Jane takes on a life of her own, posting pictures that Fin didn’t create—pictures that implicate her in a series of horrible accidents—and Fin has to stop her before she reveals an even darker truth.
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21 comments:

  1. lorrMarch 29, 2018 at 11:07 AM

    Hi! Well I'm certainly intrigued! One suggestion would be at the end "she reveals an even darker truth"- maybe switch the "she" to Jane? That would keep the pronouns super clear.

    Also, I'm curious if the implications of the horrible accidents are also true? Or are those fake set ups, but Fin also does really have a dark secret?

    This a little bit hints at some sort of Gossip Girl, all-seeing internet persona vibe too, and I'm digging it.

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  2. Caryn WisemanMarch 29, 2018 at 11:10 AM

    Sounds intriguing! I'd love to the first 50 pages of this.

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  3. JordyMarch 29, 2018 at 11:17 AM

    I'd love to see a synopsis and the first 50 pages.

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  4. MaggieMarch 29, 2018 at 11:26 AM

    Completely hooked! I particularly love the line "finds out the hard way that things on the internet live forever." Very creepy and foreboding! No critiques from me.

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  5. Ammi-Joan PaquetteMarch 29, 2018 at 11:29 AM

    Love the sound of this! Please send your query + first 3 chapters my way to consider further :)

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  6. BarbaraMarch 29, 2018 at 11:39 AM

    This sounds really cool. My favorite line- things on the internet live forever. The possibilities here seem endless. Good luck!

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  7. Carrie HanniganMarch 29, 2018 at 11:48 AM

    Hello,
    Can you please send me your query and the first 100 pages to my email below?
    Thanks!
    Carrie Hannigan
    HSG Agency
    channigan@hsgagency.com

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  8. H. R. SinclairMarch 29, 2018 at 12:04 PM

    Ooo, nice!

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  9. KatieMarch 29, 2018 at 12:06 PM

    I love this! No advice on improvements, I think it's great.

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  10. PeteMarch 29, 2018 at 1:27 PM

    Really, really good! The very end of the last line didn't read as well as the rest, but as someone said just changing the "she" to "Jane" might help there. First sentence hooked me.

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  11. Moe FerraraMarch 29, 2018 at 1:35 PM

    Oh this sounds really cool! I’d love to see the first 50 pages + a synopsis. You can upload everything via QueryManager: QueryMe.online/1005/ABBlogpitch

    Moe Ferrara
    BookEnds Literary

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  12. JennybentMarch 29, 2018 at 2:55 PM

    Could you send query and first ten pages to info@thebentagency.com. Thanks!
    Jenny Bent
    The Bent Agency

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  13. amandawritesMarch 29, 2018 at 3:24 PM

    Love it! Definitely grabbed my attention. I think those comp titles would garner a lot of interest.

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  14. UnknownMarch 29, 2018 at 5:37 PM

    Intriguing. Please email your query + 3 chapters + synopsis to lauren@triadaus.com, and include "Birthday Blog Pitch" in the subj line. I look forward to reading!

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  15. Tamar RydzinskiMarch 29, 2018 at 7:58 PM

    Sounds awesome! Please send the query letter and manuscript to queries@ldlainc.com. And include Birthday Blog Pitch in the subject line. Thanks!

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  16. Loretta ChefMarch 30, 2018 at 12:04 PM

    Great premise! Congrats on the requests!

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  17. Holly BodgerMarch 30, 2018 at 2:10 PM

    I'm a little thrown by "and finds out the hard way that things on the internet live forever." Does this happen before Jane takes on a life of her own (and if so, how has she come to the end of forever before this even starts?) Maybe you need to reword to something more exact.

    Aside from that, I'd like to know more about how Jane knows her secrets. Does she have access to her hard drive or her memories or her Facebook messages or something?

    Good luck!
    Holly

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  18. Danielle BurbyMarch 30, 2018 at 2:51 PM

    This is so cool! Please send your query and first 50 pages with the subject line "Requested Materials" to querydanielle@nelsonagency.com. I can't wait to take a look!

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  19. UnknownMarch 30, 2018 at 4:38 PM

    I absolutely love this concept.
    It's like the Bff concept but with traits of single white female.
    Would love to see exactly what happens.
    Good luck!

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  20. Michele ThorntonMarch 31, 2018 at 6:57 PM

    Thanks for the feedback, everyone!

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