TITLE: Wolf Fighter
GENRE: Adult Urban Fantasy
When you read Wolf Fighter, you walk the mean streets of an 88,000-word quest for the elusive HEA with butt-kicking along the way. Think, if Buffy were the B story. Think, Spiderman II with ghosts.
Think, Ghost Whisperer who more than whispers. When Rodney sleeps with a ghost, she comes back to life. He’s clueless, easily accepting that woman are cold and he’s their IT boy. Then he meets Marissa.
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This is such a unique and fun pitch :) ! I love it. Just wondering what the conflict is? Maybe you could hint at that, like what happens when she comes back to life etc?
ReplyDeleteTo me, there's a lack of description in this pitch. Ypu could sum most of it up with:
ReplyDeleteBUFFY x GHOST WHISPERER
Then go into the pitch. Who is Rodney?
"Hopeless when it comes to love, Rodney..."
What does meeting Marissa do? What are the stakes? If Rodney does/doesn't do x, then y will/won't happen.
I think there's more comp titles than you need here. Your second paragraph says it most eloquently, so I'd stay with just that. (I started trying to remember Spiderman II's plot when I want to know yours.) Cutting the earlier chapter will give you space to tell us what the consequences of meeting Marissa are.
ReplyDeleteQuery, not pitch!
ReplyDeleteI agree that there should be more about how it is like Spider-Man II or Ghost Whisperer. Also, each word "Think" should not have a comma after it. And I'm pretty sure "woman" is a typo. Agents or editors may not look at your sample pages if they see that sort of thing.
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