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Thursday, March 25, 2010

138 MG

TITLE: The Adventures of Puckatoo
GENRE: Middle Grade


I jumped from the back seat to the front, onto Tom’s lap and off again, and stuck my snout out the passenger’s window to feel

11 comments:

  1. Interesting -- was in the mindset of dog right away, but since I'm not a fan of the little ones, I'd probably pass.

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  2. Not sure. At first it seemed lewd, then "snout" came in... so now I'm wondering to what the snout belongs...

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  3. Like others, I am not hooked, but would keep reading the next few sentences/paragraphs to see if it grabs me.

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  4. Sorry... I'm not hooked yet. I think the wording could be nudged around here, maybe split the sentence in two. The line as it was feels rushed and rambly.

    Random: Is this a pet pig? That's mainly what comes to mind because of the 'snout'. Pigs have snouts, dogs have noses. Or at least in my mind. :)

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  5. The title caught my interest as I scrolled down, but the sentence didn't.

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  6. Talking dog books...not really my thing. Unless the dog has something truly unique to say. So not hooked, I'm afraid.

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  7. It took until 'snout' to realize this was an animal. Didn't make sense to me up until then. Not too hooked yet.

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  8. I'd keep reading. I liked the surprise of figuring out it wasn't a person.

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  9. I liked the fact that I immediately knew I was in a dogs mind. If you can keep it up throughout the book I'd read it.

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  10. Not really--first person animal narrators are hit and miss with me (I love anthrofiction, but I'm not as taken with human/animal stories if the animal is narrating).

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