Well, I liked it, but it's a little sloppy, I guess. Is there another way you could word it? Truth be told, I was hooked by your title - fantastic, I definitely would want to read more.
My first thought as I read the first part of the sentence was a sarcastic Oh really? Cuz i know plenty of folks who can claim best and worst in the same year.
Not sure this is that strong of an opening even if rewritten tho--
I thought the second part was stronger than the first. I've found important events tend to cluster, so the bit about most people not having their best and worst in a year didn't really ring true for me. But having both within five minutes... that hooked me and made me want to read on for at least a little bit.
Hooked, though it sounds suspiciously like backstory.
ReplyDeleteTotal hook. I'm intrigued and hugely want to know the details!
ReplyDeleteNice
ReplyDeleteYep. I want more. I'm already trying to think what it would be. You hear a loved one is dead - then hear five minutes later it's not true? Hmmm...
ReplyDeleteI'm hooked, and would read more.
ReplyDeleteDefinitely hooked. I want to know which came first, the best or worst moment? Exciting.
ReplyDeleteVery interesting. I'd read on.
ReplyDeleteHooked! :-)
ReplyDeleteHooked! The wording might be tripping me up a bit, but I can't put my finger on what's bugging me. And the premise is intriguing enough!
ReplyDeleteLove it. Now I want to read more to find out the best and the worst parts!
ReplyDeleteWell, I liked it, but it's a little sloppy, I guess. Is there another way you could word it?
ReplyDeleteTruth be told, I was hooked by your title - fantastic, I definitely would want to read more.
I agree with Bethany Elizabeth. I'm really intrigued by the concept, but the wording seems awkward.
ReplyDeleteCurious to read more.
ReplyDeleteClose. Not for me, I think, but I think it's hooky.
ReplyDeleteI like it and would read on. I'm curious to find out what happens next.
ReplyDeleteHooked!
ReplyDeleteMostly hooked. Hoping that what follows will start right in with those five minutes.
ReplyDeleteNot hooked, sorry.
ReplyDeleteI liked the hook, but thought the first part of the sentence could have been worded more strongly
ReplyDeleteMy first thought as I read the first part of the sentence was a sarcastic Oh really? Cuz i know plenty of folks who can claim best and worst in the same year.
ReplyDeleteNot sure this is that strong of an opening even if rewritten tho--
I thought the second part was stronger than the first. I've found important events tend to cluster, so the bit about most people not having their best and worst in a year didn't really ring true for me. But having both within five minutes... that hooked me and made me want to read on for at least a little bit.
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