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Thursday, March 25, 2010

112 Fantasy

TITLE: Beneath the Trees
GENRE: Fantasy


The latch strained; the shutters rattled. Rose longed to throw them wide and let the wind blow away the memory of her mother.
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12 comments:

  1. Sandra Ulbrich AlmazanMarch 25, 2010 at 4:30 PM

    I like the image in the second sentence, but I'm not sure this is where I'd want to begin reading the story. I'd probably read a few more lines to see if there was anything else to hook me.

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  2. WyndyDayMarch 25, 2010 at 4:41 PM

    I agree with what Tami said, I am immediately sympathetic with the MC. I would read more.

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  3. Shannon O'DonnellMarch 25, 2010 at 4:53 PM

    Hooked! Definitely. :-)

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  4. JaneMarch 25, 2010 at 7:57 PM

    Hooked. Love the emotion.

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  5. Juli Page MorganMarch 25, 2010 at 8:34 PM

    Hooked! I like this one, great imagery!

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  6. JessMarch 25, 2010 at 9:51 PM

    Lovely. I'm hooked!

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  7. Katharina GerlachMarch 26, 2010 at 4:46 AM

    Hooked. More!!

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  8. Jodi MeadowsMarch 26, 2010 at 6:32 AM

    Really close to hooked. I'd read more to see where it went.

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  9. Rebecca T.March 26, 2010 at 2:31 PM

    Pretty hooked. I like the imagery

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  10. MercMarch 26, 2010 at 8:56 PM

    Almost hooked--I'd want to see more, but it's close.

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  11. Cheryl SMarch 27, 2010 at 10:43 PM

    I loved the imagery, but felt the semi colon was unnecessary. ('and''would have served as well)

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  12. BronMarch 30, 2010 at 7:51 AM

    I'd keep reading. As others have said, great imagery.

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