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Thursday, March 25, 2010

139 YA

TITLE: Kissing Virgins
GENRE: Young Adult


I wore pink Converse to prom. I had a feeling that might be the most comfortable thing about the night.
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17 comments:

  1. StinaMarch 25, 2010 at 4:57 PM

    Hooked. Loved the title.

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  2. AnonymousMarch 25, 2010 at 4:59 PM

    Not hooked.

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  3. christinaMarch 25, 2010 at 5:03 PM

    hooked. love it!

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  4. Gracie Bea WintertonMarch 25, 2010 at 5:18 PM

    Hooked, but it feels like the tense is switching...if you wore the Converse already, how can you have a feeling that the night will be uncomfortable? Yet I like the image it puts in my head of pink Converse under a pink frilly dress. Perhaps I'm wrong.

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  5. Keren DavidMarch 25, 2010 at 5:21 PM

    Agreee about the tense - this is why I find the past tense so hard - but love the image. Would like to know what shade pink, not quite able to visualise.

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  6. shawnawksMarch 25, 2010 at 5:40 PM

    Have to say I don't love converse with prom dresses but I love the idea it brings to my mind with this little bit. I would keep reading FOR SURE!

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  7. Cate KariaxiMarch 25, 2010 at 5:46 PM

    Yes, hooked.

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  8. Sharon K. MayhewMarch 25, 2010 at 6:44 PM

    I'd keep reading.

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  9. AislinnMarch 25, 2010 at 8:32 PM

    I'm interested. I'd keep reading.

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  10. ValerieMarch 25, 2010 at 11:38 PM

    I like this, I'd keep reading. The tense throws me a little for some reason but I'd still read on.

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  11. A.L. SonnichsenMarch 25, 2010 at 11:53 PM

    Yeah, I liked this. I'd keep reading.

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  12. Vicki RochoMarch 26, 2010 at 12:56 AM

    My daughter actually did this...well, black converse. I'd read on

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  13. Amanda BorenstadtMarch 26, 2010 at 1:45 PM

    Pink Converse plus a sense of foreboding, I'm hooked! :)

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  14. MercMarch 26, 2010 at 4:08 PM

    Almost hooked--it'd depend on the rest of the opening. I liked the detail about pink Converse, though. ;)

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  15. AngieMarch 26, 2010 at 4:20 PM

    That's a great hook. Love it.

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  16. ND_GreenMarch 26, 2010 at 7:10 PM

    Thanks to all who have commented! I agree completely with the tense comments. I've been playing with it, but nothing feels right. I'll continue working with it.

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  17. Cheryl SMarch 27, 2010 at 9:23 PM

    Kinda hard doing future past tense, eh? Worthy effort though.

    Backseat writer comment here:

    'I must have had an inkling that this night would be far from comfortable for me. Maybe that was why I wore my pink *Converse to (the) prom.'

    *Converse is not a well known brand here in Oz. This tripped me up for a moment

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