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Thursday, March 25, 2010

31 SF/Suspense

TITLE: DARKLIGHT
GENRE: Adult Sci-Fi/Suspense


September 11, 2001 - 9:35 a.m.

Major General Gerald L. "Lucky" Sinclair, US Air Force, was walking along the E-Ring of the Pentagon, on his way out
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18 comments:

  1. MomwomanMarch 25, 2010 at 9:35 AM

    Just not doning it. Maybe I don't like the idea of sci/fi and the Pentagon together?

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  2. UnknownMarch 25, 2010 at 9:41 AM

    cool. i like it.

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  3. Jodi MeadowsMarch 25, 2010 at 9:59 AM

    Maybe. Gonna be hard to pull off a 9/11 story.

    I like the title, but I'm afraid it's probably been used. Might want to do a search on Amazon.

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  4. AnnaMarch 25, 2010 at 10:06 AM

    I'm on the fence with this one, but I have to admit that I initially balked at the 9/11 date, and that would be pretty hard for me to get past. Totally a personal thing, on that front. Other than that, I'm mildly intrigued - not a strong push to keep reading, but interested enough to see about the next page or two.

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  5. Meghan S.March 25, 2010 at 10:16 AM

    I don't mind the 9/11 date, that is what would probably catch my interest in the first place. But I don't need to know he's a major general & his nickname is "Lucky." I think those descriptions can wait, they don't need to be part of the first sentence

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  6. fairchildMarch 25, 2010 at 10:26 AM

    I'd read on.

    The long name and titles at the start were a bit much to get through.


    Wordver: forks

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  7. Kitty DuCaneMarch 25, 2010 at 11:08 AM

    I'd read on only because I like all things military.

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  8. SelestialMarch 25, 2010 at 11:14 AM

    I'm curious about this so I'd probably give it a little longer, but that would be more because of the title and the 9/11 set-up. The sentence itself didn't do anything for me.

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  9. Beth C.March 25, 2010 at 12:15 PM

    I'm curious about how scifi fits in with 9/11. I would read on.

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  10. KateeMarch 25, 2010 at 12:18 PM

    Too much info-dumping in the first sentence. It threw me off. Not hooked.

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  11. samsevernMarch 25, 2010 at 12:50 PM

    Not hooked. Didn't even realize the significance of the date until I read another reader's comment.

    I agree with Beth, if there's a fit with 9/11 and Sci-Fi, and you show me, then I'm HOOKED! ㋡

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  12. smrMarch 25, 2010 at 1:03 PM

    the 9/11 connection is a turn off to me. that wasn't sci fi, that was very real. not hooked.

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  13. BarbaraMarch 25, 2010 at 1:51 PM

    The general has almost left the building.

    Sorry. It doesn't do anything for me.

    The 9/11 and sci-fi aspect are interesting, but not interesting enough to overcome the opening line.

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  14. falconesseMarch 25, 2010 at 2:21 PM

    I have to echo the 9/11 concern, but I'd also say the date and time at the start are what gives it the tension in the first place (otherwise, it's a general walking out of the Pentagon -- a hook for location, I suppose, but not a suspenseful action by itself.

    I'm also not a big fan of starting out with full names and titles. "Major General Gerald L. "Lucky" Sinclair, US Air Force," eats up nine words, but I don't know how much it really shows me about him. I'm guessing that the nickname is the most important thing in there, but it gets a little lost otherwise.

    I think this is one where I'd flip to the back cover and read the blurb to see what the story is about before I pressed on further.

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  15. IrisMarch 25, 2010 at 2:46 PM

    About hooked.

    I am not a fan of 9/11 stories, too overexposed, but the sci-fi twist would get me to pay attention. The long name does not bother me, although I admit that within 25 words, 9 words of a name feels a bit excessive. :)

    Would read a few more lines.

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  16. AnonymousMarch 25, 2010 at 4:23 PM

    Meh. (sorry!) To me, 9/11 is too easy a way to create instant drama & suspense.

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  17. Krista Van DolzerMarch 26, 2010 at 9:36 AM

    I, too, shuddered a little at the combination of September 11th and SF. It IS immediately intriguing - but maybe not in the way that you'd want.

    Not hooked.

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  18. MercMarch 26, 2010 at 10:10 PM

    Not really hooked, but then I'm not really into 9/11 stories.

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