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Thursday, March 25, 2010

30 YA

TITLE: THE UNBECOMING OF MARA DYER
GENRE: YA


My name is not Mara Dyer, but my lawyer told me I had to choose something.
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45 comments:

  1. Holly BodgerMarch 25, 2010 at 9:31 AM

    Love it...hooked!

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  2. Kristin CelmsMarch 25, 2010 at 9:34 AM

    This is a great one. Really grabs me.

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  3. angelareneMarch 25, 2010 at 9:36 AM

    Love the title and I'm hooked...

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  4. SteveMarch 25, 2010 at 9:42 AM

    Definitely want to know why a lawyer's involved in the first sentence! The title's intriguing too.

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  5. Amy BennettMarch 25, 2010 at 9:50 AM

    Definitely hooked!

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  6. AnnaMarch 25, 2010 at 9:56 AM

    Who's the lawyer, and why's she got to choose? Definitely would keep reading this one.

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  7. Jodi MeadowsMarch 25, 2010 at 9:58 AM

    Yep.

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  8. EsperantoMarch 25, 2010 at 10:13 AM

    I want to read this one!! Please tell me it's getting published soon.

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  9. WyndyDayMarch 25, 2010 at 10:16 AM

    Hooked. :)

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  10. Juli Page MorganMarch 25, 2010 at 10:22 AM

    I usually don't read YA, but if I saw this first sentence, I'd buy this book. Hooked for sure!

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  11. Teresa NMarch 25, 2010 at 10:25 AM

    Hooked! It's amazing how one sentence can spark so many questions.

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  12. LaurieMarch 25, 2010 at 11:02 AM

    I'm hooked too!

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  13. Cate KariaxiMarch 25, 2010 at 11:07 AM

    Yes, definitely hooked<:

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  14. SelestialMarch 25, 2010 at 11:13 AM

    I really like this. I'd definitely read on.

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  15. Carolyn R. ParsonsMarch 25, 2010 at 11:24 AM

    Yes, this one is a definite hook :)

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  16. A.L. SonnichsenMarch 25, 2010 at 11:27 AM

    Totally hooked. Great opening.

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  17. StinaMarch 25, 2010 at 11:38 AM

    Not hooked. I've seen a similar start in another contest. But it was a social worker, I think.

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  18. Chantal KirklandMarch 25, 2010 at 11:56 AM

    Ok. I'd read more...its a little loose, but I'd read on.

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  19. KateeMarch 25, 2010 at 12:17 PM

    Hooked.

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  20. Jessica L. Brooks (coffeelvnmom)March 25, 2010 at 12:23 PM

    Hooked.

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  21. Valerie KempMarch 25, 2010 at 12:31 PM

    Hooked!

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  22. WalterMarch 25, 2010 at 12:43 PM

    You've got me hooked.

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  23. samsevernMarch 25, 2010 at 12:46 PM

    HOOKED!! BIG-TIME! ㋡

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  24. Shannon O'DonnellMarch 25, 2010 at 1:01 PM

    Yep! I'm hooked. :-)

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  25. smrMarch 25, 2010 at 1:04 PM

    hooked!

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  26. Joshua McCuneMarch 25, 2010 at 1:14 PM

    Great.

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  27. SophiaMarch 25, 2010 at 1:34 PM

    Hooked!

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  28. Casey SomethingMarch 25, 2010 at 1:35 PM

    Hooked.

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  29. BarbaraMarch 25, 2010 at 1:45 PM

    It's a winner! That sentence with the title opens up a world of questions!

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  30. falconesseMarch 25, 2010 at 2:06 PM

    Hooked. There are several questions that'll grab the reader with that line (what is her name? Why does she have a lawyer in the first place?)

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  31. IrisMarch 25, 2010 at 2:31 PM

    Hooked.

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  32. Vicki TremperMarch 25, 2010 at 2:51 PM

    Intrigued.

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  33. DK WhismanMarch 25, 2010 at 3:07 PM

    Haha. Love this.

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  34. MKMarch 25, 2010 at 4:02 PM

    Hooked!

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  35. Carol Newman CroninMarch 25, 2010 at 4:15 PM

    Definitely hooked. No wasted words here!

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  36. EmMarch 25, 2010 at 10:19 PM

    Reel me in, because I'm hooked!

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  37. ChristiMarch 25, 2010 at 10:43 PM

    Totally hooked.
    I want to know more. Why does she need another name? What is her real name?

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  38. StellaMarch 25, 2010 at 10:54 PM

    Great opening. Definitely want to find out more.

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  39. JessicaMarch 26, 2010 at 12:02 AM

    Completely hooked! I need to know more!

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  40. Krista Van DolzerMarch 26, 2010 at 9:42 AM

    I agree and disagree with Stina Lindenblatt - I've seen a similar start on another site, too, but I think it works.

    UPDATE: I remembered where I saw something similar - on Nathan Bransford's most recent first paragraph contest - and went and looked it up. And lo and behold, that entry was yours, too:) So I guess you've got something really memorable here.

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  41. UnknownMarch 26, 2010 at 1:39 PM

    Definitely hooked! I'd love to know more about "Mara"...

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  42. UnknownMarch 26, 2010 at 2:49 PM

    Hooked! Why can't she go by her real name and why does she have a lawyer? I love the title.

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  43. JessMarch 26, 2010 at 5:58 PM

    Hooked! :)

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  44. Elizabeth LundMarch 26, 2010 at 8:06 PM

    Great opening!

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  45. MercMarch 26, 2010 at 10:10 PM

    Yup, hooked. Love the title, too.

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