Hmm...I think this should have been 25 words (we're not judging first sentences.) Because after 32 entries, I've noticed that a lot can change after the first five.
Not hooked, because the sentence doesn't have meaning without context. Therefore I would be annoyed, though I might read another sentence or two to find out what it means.
I like this first sentence. But I'm afraid -- if the next sentence is more than 20 words -- you're going to quickly lose me in purple prose. Prove me wrong! :)
Hooked. To me, the "it" sounds pretty ominous. I'll echo the others who want to see the second sentence, but I like the tone those first five words set.
Heck yeah I'm hooked!! Awesome and only 5 words!!!
ReplyDeleteI like this except for the "it".
ReplyDeletethis is great
ReplyDeleteHooked!
ReplyDeleteYes.
ReplyDeleteYou're not alone, Tami. I'm a little interested, but not hooked off the bat.
ReplyDeleteHmm...I think this should have been 25 words (we're not judging first sentences.) Because after 32 entries, I've noticed that a lot can change after the first five.
ReplyDeleteAs is, I'd give it a few more lines.
YES!!!
ReplyDeleteWould read the next sentence to see what it was.
ReplyDeleteI'd give it more to find out what "it" was, but I'm not sure I'm hooked yet.
ReplyDeleteNot hooked, because the sentence doesn't have meaning without context. Therefore I would be annoyed, though I might read another sentence or two to find out what it means.
ReplyDeleteI do not read fantasy..normally..but I liked this sentence and want to know more so I say hooked!
ReplyDeleteI like this first sentence. But I'm afraid -- if the next sentence is more than 20 words -- you're going to quickly lose me in purple prose. Prove me wrong! :)
ReplyDeleteThat's your first "25?" How long is that second sentence?
ReplyDelete'Fraid it's not enough to say anything.
Not really enough to go on, sorry.
ReplyDeleteMaybe hooked, if I had more to go on.
ReplyDeleteThe 'it' killed the sentence for me.
ReplyDeleteNot a lover of fantasy, but...not hooked.
ReplyDeleteNope. I wanted another sentence for context.
ReplyDeleteMakes no sense to me. Not hooked.
ReplyDeleteHooked. To me, the "it" sounds pretty ominous. I'll echo the others who want to see the second sentence, but I like the tone those first five words set.
ReplyDeleteHooked. The "it" clinched it :) So creepy.
ReplyDeleteHooked. Love it! (:
ReplyDeleteI do like this as an opening line, but I thought the whole point of the exercise was to post a bit more.
ReplyDeleteWhy didn't you use all 25 words? I'd love to read more
ReplyDeleteHuh. Hooked. I'd read more.
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