Pages

▼

Thursday, March 25, 2010

68 Chapter Book

TITLE: Spooner
GENRE: Chapter book



“For once,” Tony said, “I’d like to be better than anyone else at something.”

His sister Emily walked over. “Your wish has been granted, Tony..."
at

17 comments:

  1. Kristi FaithMarch 25, 2010 at 10:15 AM

    not so hooked with this one. I guess it's the wish and granting it...seems over done.

    However-the first 25 words is really hard to judge!!

    ReplyDelete
  2. Jodi MeadowsMarch 25, 2010 at 10:38 AM

    Not bad. Kind of creepy that it's the sister doing the granting. But still, if he wished things all the time, that could get messy.

    But the wish thing is pretty familiar. I still need more to be hooked.

    ReplyDelete
  3. Teresa NMarch 25, 2010 at 10:52 AM

    Sorry, not hooked.

    ReplyDelete
  4. BluestockingMarch 25, 2010 at 11:24 AM

    Prob not the best to comment on a chapter book, but I also question why the sister grants the wish. I want to see more of a dynamic between the siblings

    ReplyDelete
  5. fairchildMarch 25, 2010 at 11:28 AM

    I have a feeling that the sister is being sarcastic? Otherwise, I'm not sure how I feel about this.

    ReplyDelete
  6. Rebecca T.March 25, 2010 at 12:06 PM

    It seems too stiffly told for a chapter book. I don't know. It is hard to tell just from 25 words, but most kids reading this would probably not be hooked.

    ReplyDelete
  7. Casey SomethingMarch 25, 2010 at 1:22 PM

    I think the next couple of sentences would really decide things for me, but if this is all I had to go on I'd have to say not hooked.

    ReplyDelete
  8. CatMarch 25, 2010 at 1:26 PM

    I'm not hooked. Not exciting enough. I agree this concept is over used. Perhaps there is a better place to begin the MS.

    ReplyDelete
  9. PortiaMarch 25, 2010 at 1:57 PM

    I like the first line, and I'm hooked there. The second (His sister Emily walked over) could use some finessing. Right now it sounds a little stiff, like stage direction. Close!

    ReplyDelete
  10. AnonymousMarch 25, 2010 at 4:46 PM

    Maybe. How is the sister able to grant wishes? Or is she saying it just because? I'd read on to see if you answered my questions.

    ReplyDelete
  11. melody colleenMarch 25, 2010 at 4:52 PM

    Like others said, it seems a bit stiff. And I, too, thought the sister was being sarcastic.

    Not quite sure.

    ReplyDelete
  12. Sharon K. MayhewMarch 25, 2010 at 6:01 PM

    Liked it...I figure the relationship between the siblings will be a fun one.

    ReplyDelete
  13. BarbaraMarch 25, 2010 at 6:23 PM

    Am I hooked? No. But does that mean a little kid wouldn't be? Hard to say. I think most kids like the idea of free wishes. I don't know if his sister can grant them, or if she's just pretending, but I'd be willing to go a bit further to see.

    ReplyDelete
  14. rheaMarch 25, 2010 at 6:43 PM

    I liked this and am wondering what his sister knows. Hooked.

    ReplyDelete
  15. MsJudyMarch 25, 2010 at 10:56 PM

    For a chapter book, no, not hooked. Because chapter book readers need a really clear set-up. If they could figure things out, they'd be ready for MG books. So not telling us who the boy is or where he is or why he wants a wish to come true, but then having his sister offer to grant it--especially if it's sarcastic--it doesn't feel like a chapter book voice to me. If this were MG, I'd keep reading, though.

    ReplyDelete
  16. MercMarch 26, 2010 at 9:31 PM

    Not hooked, sorry.

    ReplyDelete
  17. SelestialMarch 27, 2010 at 9:46 PM

    Not sure on this one. I might give it a little more just to see if something really grabs me, but on its own, this doesn't hook me.

    ReplyDelete