Miss Snark's First Victim
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very intriguing... I'm hooked
Great opening. The juxtaposition of the mundane and the supernatural is perfect; it sets the tone straight off.
Loved it! My first thought was "That can't be 25 words. Why didn't she give us another sentence?"
Although I have never totalled a company car nor lost the soul of a serial killer, I still feel sympathy for your MC. Good job.
Great start. Love the tone.
Great start that shows the urban fantasy elements right away.
Great. Puts me in the main characters head, gives me tone and voice--everything I need to want to read on.
Def hooked - love the juxtaposition of something that could be somewhat ordinary (totaling a car) and fantastical (losing a soul, especially that of a serial killer). You've got me - perfect as is.
Wow! Hooked in one sentence. Great opening line.
Hooked. I like the title too.
Love it! I want to read more.
Yeah, that's cool! To me, this sentence defines the genre "Urban Fantasy"
Excellent beginning. Yes, I would like to read more.
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ReplyDeleteAlthough I have never totalled a company car nor lost the soul of a serial killer, I still feel sympathy for your MC. Good job.
ReplyDeleteGreat start. Love the tone.
ReplyDeleteGreat start that shows the urban fantasy elements right away.
ReplyDeleteGreat. Puts me in the main characters head, gives me tone and voice--everything I need to want to read on.
ReplyDeleteDef hooked - love the juxtaposition of something that could be somewhat ordinary (totaling a car) and fantastical (losing a soul, especially that of a serial killer). You've got me - perfect as is.
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