TITLE: Persephone's Waltz
GENRE: Adult Fantasy
Holy Maiden Ysabel has four months left to live. Then she stops the assassination of Dark Lord Kaine, a trans man leading a rebel army. In gratitude, he rescues her from becoming a human sacrifice—by kidnapping her. Hades X Persephone meets the humor of Terry Pratchett and the world-building of N.K. Jemisin.
I have four months, three weeks, and two days left to live. Yet here I sit, wasting a precious hour attending the Council of Cardinals.
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Yes! Love this premise, and such a great beginning!
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ReplyDeletei don't know if you need the "trans man" part in your pitch since it doesn't connect to the story, but I'm interested enough to keep reading.
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ReplyDeleteThe pitch intrigued me, though I am unsure of why the "trans man" part is here. I don't think we need it for the pitch. From the opening lines I would keep reading.
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ReplyDeleteThe pitch is strong, and the first two lines have great voice.
YES. Fresh premise. Fresh voice. Great job.
ReplyDeleteYES: I like the pitch a lot. My only critique would be to answer why does she have only have four months to live? The opening lines work very well. Good luck :)
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ReplyDeleteI have a number of questions that would keep me reading. I feel like the story will be full of surprises.