Weak hook. I'd keep reading a bit further to make a stronger decision, but no sense of the main character's personality or voice here. Shooting a vampire isn't enough of a hook for me.
Sorry... I'm not hooked yet. This is the 25 word thing, but I felt this was too much to the point, when it could be building up the situation, describing the target before the protagonist raised his/her weapon.
Weak hook. I'd keep reading a bit further to make a stronger decision, but no sense of the main character's personality or voice here. Shooting a vampire isn't enough of a hook for me.
ReplyDeleteVampires get shot (or shot at) all the time. Why is this time more special than the thousands that went before? Answer that and I might keep reading.
ReplyDeleteI like that it starts with action. Hooked. I'd read more to see how the fight goes...
ReplyDeleteNot really hooked. If it were as simple as the remark implies, there would be nothing else to the story.
ReplyDeleteSorry... I'm not hooked yet. This is the 25 word thing, but I felt this was too much to the point, when it could be building up the situation, describing the target before the protagonist raised his/her weapon.
ReplyDeleteVampireszzzzzzzzzzzz....
ReplyDeletePartially hooked. I haven't seen a vamp book open like this before.
ReplyDeleteCould be more hooked, but not not hooked.
ReplyDeleteNot hooked, sorry. Hunting vampires in UF? That's... pretty common, so I would have to see what makes this one DIFFERENT before I'd want to read on.
ReplyDeleteNot very hooked. I like a good vampire story, but I don't see anything very new yet (even though I know it's hard to do in 25 words!)
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