TITLE: Sendek
GENRE: Science Fantasy
Talia and Commander Landry survived a suicide bombing of a tram (train) and she tried to thank him for saving her life, but communicating telepathically makes it hard to hide certain feelings.
Landry leaned forward, and untangling one hand he lifted my face and pulled my lips to his. The shock that ran through me when we touched was nothing compared to the sensation of our lips meeting. My arms wrapped around him and my hands wove their way into his hair as I pulled him closer. All that existed were his arms and his lips. As he nibbled my lower lip, something within broke loose and I melted into him. Landry's mind whispered the fear of losing himself in this hurricane of emotion at the same time a tear reached my lips. As the saltiness registered on my tongue, I remembered myself. I half-heartedly pushed him away as my kiss grew hungrier. My body was not ready to give him up, but the slight pressure had its effect. Landry pulled away and we both gasped for air. He looked as startled as I felt.
Miss Snark's First Victim
Wednesday, February 2, 2011
First Kiss #1
TITLE: TOUCH
GENRE: YA paranormal romance
Seth suffers from a curse that makes it impossible for him to touch anyone, but Holly doesn't know that. They've both been in denial that they want to be anything more than friends. It's halftime at a football game.
My body had its own ideas, and Seth's was like a magnet. I couldn't have fought it even if I'd wanted to. And who was I kidding? Nothing about him made me want to do that.
I slid along the bench. Electric air between us. A barricade, and a bridge. I ached to cross it. He leaned toward me. My lips quivered.
The music on the field built.
His breath hovered on my lips, so sweet.
His gaze didn't waver, so intense, it seared straight to my soul.
I couldn't wait any longer. I bent forward, closing the last distance between us.
With a final drum clap, the song ended. Seth broke our gaze and jumped back before our lips touched. He spun away from me. His fists clenched the railing, his body trembled.
"I'm sorry, I shouldn't be here with you." He turned, a pained look in his eyes. "I thought I could do this, but it's too hard."
GENRE: YA paranormal romance
Seth suffers from a curse that makes it impossible for him to touch anyone, but Holly doesn't know that. They've both been in denial that they want to be anything more than friends. It's halftime at a football game.
My body had its own ideas, and Seth's was like a magnet. I couldn't have fought it even if I'd wanted to. And who was I kidding? Nothing about him made me want to do that.
I slid along the bench. Electric air between us. A barricade, and a bridge. I ached to cross it. He leaned toward me. My lips quivered.
The music on the field built.
His breath hovered on my lips, so sweet.
His gaze didn't waver, so intense, it seared straight to my soul.
I couldn't wait any longer. I bent forward, closing the last distance between us.
With a final drum clap, the song ended. Seth broke our gaze and jumped back before our lips touched. He spun away from me. His fists clenched the railing, his body trembled.
"I'm sorry, I shouldn't be here with you." He turned, a pained look in his eyes. "I thought I could do this, but it's too hard."
Smooches Galore!
Okay, here come the kisses.
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I have the blog set up to accept comments from everyone, so you do NOT need a blogger account to use a screen name here. "Anonymous" can be so confusing; I'm begging you to avoid it!
Have fun with this! As always, be kind and honest. (I don't really have to say that. You're all so amazing with crits.)
Tuesday, February 1, 2011
Submissions Are Now Closed
We have our 30 kisses! They'll start posting tomorrow morning at 10:00 EST.
This should be fun!
This should be fun!
A FIRST KISS Critique Round
What better way to kick off February!
I'm opening submissions at 5:00 pm EST TODAY (February 1) and will accept the first 30 submissions (plus one alternate).
GUIDELINES:
TITLE: (type your title here)
GENRE: (type your genre here)
(Type a 1-sentence lead-in to your kiss scene here.)
(Type your 150-word kiss scene here.)
Yes, I've padded the word count to accommodate the lead-in. But you've only got 50 extra words, so don't be verbose. (Heh.)
Post your questions below!
I'm opening submissions at 5:00 pm EST TODAY (February 1) and will accept the first 30 submissions (plus one alternate).
GUIDELINES:
- Please submit your 150-word "first kiss" scene.
- The scene may be from a finished manuscript or a WIP.
- Agented and unagented authors may enter.
- Please: NO UBER-GRAPHIC KISSES. This is a PG-13 site. (Discretion mine.)
- Format as follows:
TITLE: (type your title here)
GENRE: (type your genre here)
(Type a 1-sentence lead-in to your kiss scene here.)
(Type your 150-word kiss scene here.)
Yes, I've padded the word count to accommodate the lead-in. But you've only got 50 extra words, so don't be verbose. (Heh.)
Post your questions below!
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