For the second year in a row, one of our dedicated readers is offering her blog for a logline critique session for those of you WHO ENTERED THE LOGLINE CRITIQUE SESSIONS ON MSFV BUT DID NOT GET PICKED. Now's your chance to get some feedback, after all!
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I am hosting another logline critique session on my website. Since I can’t handle too many, I will post thirteen loglines for critique, in honor of the original ‘Baker’s Dozen’, as I did last year. This time I’m asking that anyone interested in submitting their logline for critique send it to me in an email, and I will post the first thirteen legitimate logline entries I receive that follow the rules.
When I say legitimate logline, I mean that it can’t be a tagline or something else that shows that you haven’t done any research on loglines or spent any time reviewing the other logline critiques. Of course your logline may be far from perfect--that’s why we’re trying to help each other improve them--but there’s no excuse for submitting something that shows that you have no idea what a logline is; Authoress has made plenty of information on loglines available here.
Here are the rules for this logline critique:
- This is only for those who are entering Baker’s Dozen but who did not get into one of the three logline critique rounds (either because your entry was never picked or you didn’t get a chance to submit).
- The submission window begins Saturday morning at 9:00 AM MST and ends at 5:00 PM MST. Yes, that’s Mountain Standard Time, since I’m out here in the wild west--and I’m afraid I’m terrible at keeping track of time zones and daylight savings time (which we don’t have in my state), so you will have to figure out what time that is in your own time zone.
- Send your logline in an email to lcm(at)lcmcgehee.com. The title of your email must say ‘Baker’s Dozen Logline Critique’.
- In the body of your email, please put the following information:
Title: XXXXXXX
Age Category: XXXXX
Genre: XXXXXX
Then type your logline below it, remembering that it cannot be more than 75 words.
Incidentally, I’ve seen a few entries here that just said ‘YA’ on the genre line--YA is not a genre, folks, it’s an age category. (And on top of the fact that it can help people when critiquing your logline to know the genre, you’d better know what your genre is if you’re querying agents!) :)
The age category must be either ‘Adult’ (or New Adult), ‘YA’ or ‘MG’. Although I will keep the critique session open for comments all week (and it may take me a few days to get through all of them myself), I will make certain to give feedback on the Adult ones first, and encourage the other participants to do the same. This is because the Adult submissions for Baker’s Dozen are this coming Tuesday and Thursday, while the YA and MG authors have a little more time to whip their loglines into shape.
I will email the entrants whose loglines will be posted, and tell them when the critique session begins, which should be Saturday afternoon or evening--it will begin as soon I have thirteen entries and have gotten them all posted on my website. I promise I will give feedback on each entry, and if your logline is posted for critique, please critique a minimum of five other loglines, just as Authoress requests here.
Lastly, if you don’t get an email reply, I'm sorry but that will mean your logline wasn’t selected.
Thanks, everyone!
L.C. McGehee :)
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Friday, October 24, 2014
Tuesday, October 11, 2011
Logline Critique, Round 3
The submission window will be open from 9 am to 5 pm EDT today. This is a lottery, which means the bot will randomly choose 40 entries at the close of the window. These entries will post tomorrow morning for critique.
EMAIL SUBMISSIONS:
As always, send your submission to authoress.submissions(at)gmail.com. Format as follows:
SCREEN NAME: (type it here)
TITLE: (type it here)
GENRE: (type it here)
(type your <100-word logline here)
WEB FORM SUBMISSIONS:
GO HERE. Follow the instructions on the web form.
EMAIL SUBMISSIONS:
As always, send your submission to authoress.submissions(at)gmail.com. Format as follows:
SCREEN NAME: (type it here)
TITLE: (type it here)
GENRE: (type it here)
(type your <100-word logline here)
WEB FORM SUBMISSIONS:
GO HERE. Follow the instructions on the web form.
Wednesday, October 5, 2011
And we have round 2!
The fun begins again!
If yours is one of the 40 posted today, please be kind enough to critique a minimum of 10 others.
Huge thanks to Michael, who worked out some snags for me last night, even though his wife has just given birth to a gorgeous baby girl!
If yours is one of the 40 posted today, please be kind enough to critique a minimum of 10 others.
Huge thanks to Michael, who worked out some snags for me last night, even though his wife has just given birth to a gorgeous baby girl!
Tuesday, October 4, 2011
Logline Critique, Round 2
The submission window will be open from 9 am to 5 pm EDT today. This is a lottery, which means the bot will randomly choose 40 entries at the close of the window. These entries will post tomorrow morning for critique.
EMAIL SUBMISSIONS:
As always, send your submission to authoress.submissions(at)gmail.com. Format as follows:
SCREEN NAME: (type it here)
TITLE: (type it here)
GENRE: (type it here)
(type your <100-word logline here)
WEB FORM SUBMISSIONS:
GO HERE. Follow the instructions on the web form.
Please note! Word count has been reduced to 100 max. And your logline should actually be shorter than that.
Have fun!
EMAIL SUBMISSIONS:
As always, send your submission to authoress.submissions(at)gmail.com. Format as follows:
SCREEN NAME: (type it here)
TITLE: (type it here)
GENRE: (type it here)
(type your <100-word logline here)
WEB FORM SUBMISSIONS:
GO HERE. Follow the instructions on the web form.
Please note! Word count has been reduced to 100 max. And your logline should actually be shorter than that.
Have fun!
Wednesday, September 28, 2011
Round One Logline Critique
Okay, here come the loglines!
IMPORTANT: If yours is one of the 40 entries, please be kind enough to take the time to critique a minimum of 10 other entries. (Yes, 10. Loglines are short.)
Remember, loglines aren't the same as full-out pitches. Some of today's entries fall outside the logline parameters and will need some guidance in cutting their words down to the snappy, just-the-basics information a logline needs. Which is the whole point of this exercise.
Have fun! Definitely some cool premises out there.
(Know what's cool? I never have to remind you to be kind. Because you always are.)
IMPORTANT: If yours is one of the 40 entries, please be kind enough to take the time to critique a minimum of 10 other entries. (Yes, 10. Loglines are short.)
Remember, loglines aren't the same as full-out pitches. Some of today's entries fall outside the logline parameters and will need some guidance in cutting their words down to the snappy, just-the-basics information a logline needs. Which is the whole point of this exercise.
Have fun! Definitely some cool premises out there.
(Know what's cool? I never have to remind you to be kind. Because you always are.)
Tuesday, September 27, 2011
Logline Critique, Round 1
The submission window will be open from 9 am to 5 pm EDT today. This is a lottery, which means the bot will randomly choose 40 entries at the close of the window. These entries will post tomorrow morning for critique.
EMAIL SUBMISSIONS:
As always, send your submission to authoress.submissions(at)gmail.com. Format as follows:
SCREEN NAME: (type it here)
TITLE: (type it here)
GENRE: (type it here)
(type your 150-word logline here)
WEB FORM SUBMISSIONS:
GO HERE. Follow the instructions on the web form.
That's it! Post your questions below.
EMAIL SUBMISSIONS:
As always, send your submission to authoress.submissions(at)gmail.com. Format as follows:
SCREEN NAME: (type it here)
TITLE: (type it here)
GENRE: (type it here)
(type your 150-word logline here)
WEB FORM SUBMISSIONS:
GO HERE. Follow the instructions on the web form.
That's it! Post your questions below.
Thursday, September 22, 2011
Crafting Your Logline
Call it a "hook" or a "pitch" or whatever you'd like, but make sure you nail it in time for the Baker's Dozen Auction submissions!
First, READ THIS POST about writing loglines.
Next, read these helpful tidbits:
From Blake Snyder's Save the Cat:
"A logline is the one- or two-sentence description of your [novel] that tells us what it is. It must contain a type of hero (that means a type of person plus an adjective that describes him), the antagonist (ditto), and the hero's primal goal. It must have irony, and it must bloom in our brains with potential."
From author Holly Bodger, the logline queen:
"When [MAIN CHARACTER] [INCITING INCIDENT], he [CONFLICT]. And if he doesn't [GOAL] he will [CONSEQUENCES]."
Please remember that there is no perfect formula for a logline. There are components that a strong logline needs, and this will flesh out in whatever way best portrays your story and its inherent conflict.
We will be having three logline critique sessions on the blog. Submissions for the first one will be this coming Tuesday, September 27. It will be a lottery with a large submission window, so you won't have to hover over your mouse. Forty loglines will be chosen at random and posted on the blog on Wednesday the 28th.
Questions below!
First, READ THIS POST about writing loglines.
Next, read these helpful tidbits:
From Blake Snyder's Save the Cat:
"A logline is the one- or two-sentence description of your [novel] that tells us what it is. It must contain a type of hero (that means a type of person plus an adjective that describes him), the antagonist (ditto), and the hero's primal goal. It must have irony, and it must bloom in our brains with potential."
From author Holly Bodger, the logline queen:
"When [MAIN CHARACTER] [INCITING INCIDENT], he [CONFLICT]. And if he doesn't [GOAL] he will [CONSEQUENCES]."
Please remember that there is no perfect formula for a logline. There are components that a strong logline needs, and this will flesh out in whatever way best portrays your story and its inherent conflict.
We will be having three logline critique sessions on the blog. Submissions for the first one will be this coming Tuesday, September 27. It will be a lottery with a large submission window, so you won't have to hover over your mouse. Forty loglines will be chosen at random and posted on the blog on Wednesday the 28th.
Questions below!
Tuesday, November 9, 2010
Attention Participants of Logline Crits 2 and 3!
Two more altruistic souls have stepped forward to offer further critique opportunities on their blogs!
FOR THE 25 PARTICIPANTS OF LOGLINE CRITIQUE ROUND 2:
Rachael Harrie has created YOUR CRITIQUE OPPORTUNITY HERE.
FOR THE 25 PARTICIPANTS OF LOGLINE CRITIQUE ROUND 3:
Walter Williams has created YOUR CRITIQUE OPPORTUNITY HERE.
Wow. That was a lot of capitals. It's admittedly exciting, though, to watch this community continue to self-nurture. This Agent Auction is going to be one amazing ride!
FOR THE 25 PARTICIPANTS OF LOGLINE CRITIQUE ROUND 2:
Rachael Harrie has created YOUR CRITIQUE OPPORTUNITY HERE.
FOR THE 25 PARTICIPANTS OF LOGLINE CRITIQUE ROUND 3:
Walter Williams has created YOUR CRITIQUE OPPORTUNITY HERE.
Wow. That was a lot of capitals. It's admittedly exciting, though, to watch this community continue to self-nurture. This Agent Auction is going to be one amazing ride!
Wednesday, November 3, 2010
And while you're busy critting:
Two things.
1. I totally forgot to share this link with you last Friday. The delightful Holly Bodger has posted A SECOND INSTALLMENT of thoughts on the logline critiques. She has tirelessly critiqued every entry so far, and I expect we'll see her around today, too.
2. Steena Holmes has been hosting a LOGLINE BLOGFEST this week, and she says it's still not too late to join in! This is for all of you who were unable to squeak into one of our critique sessions and would like to get (and give!) feedback. (Thank you, Steena!)
Okie dokie. Back to the critting!
1. I totally forgot to share this link with you last Friday. The delightful Holly Bodger has posted A SECOND INSTALLMENT of thoughts on the logline critiques. She has tirelessly critiqued every entry so far, and I expect we'll see her around today, too.
2. Steena Holmes has been hosting a LOGLINE BLOGFEST this week, and she says it's still not too late to join in! This is for all of you who were unable to squeak into one of our critique sessions and would like to get (and give!) feedback. (Thank you, Steena!)
Okie dokie. Back to the critting!
Logline Critique Session Three #25
TITLE: FLORA
GENRE: young adult urban fantasy
Sixteen year-old Dahlia Kennedy can't help but fall for the mysterious man in her dreams after being alone in them for the past ten years. But when she finds out who Rowan really is and he disappears, she must help find him or risk his world falling apart and losing him forever.
GENRE: young adult urban fantasy
Sixteen year-old Dahlia Kennedy can't help but fall for the mysterious man in her dreams after being alone in them for the past ten years. But when she finds out who Rowan really is and he disappears, she must help find him or risk his world falling apart and losing him forever.
Logline Critique Session Three #24
TITLE: Ink Wash
GENRE: YA Urban Fantasy
Sixteen-year-old Katie moves to Japan and crosses paths with her school's arrogant and gorgeous kendo star, whose drawings come to life in dangerous ways.
GENRE: YA Urban Fantasy
Sixteen-year-old Katie moves to Japan and crosses paths with her school's arrogant and gorgeous kendo star, whose drawings come to life in dangerous ways.
Logline Critique Session Three #23
TITLE: The Keeper
GENRE: Middle Grade
Chasing a legend can be dangerous. Finding out it's real can be deadly when Jack's sanity is on the line, he's stuck searching for clues with someone he barely knows, and his fate - sealed by ancestral bloodlines - is to protect the Daylight Stones, fabled to destroy the world...all before he turns thirteen.
GENRE: Middle Grade
Chasing a legend can be dangerous. Finding out it's real can be deadly when Jack's sanity is on the line, he's stuck searching for clues with someone he barely knows, and his fate - sealed by ancestral bloodlines - is to protect the Daylight Stones, fabled to destroy the world...all before he turns thirteen.
Logline Critique Session Three #22
TITLE: The Garden at the Roof of the World
GENRE: Romantic Historical Fantasy
Gwenaella, a convent student in the high middle ages, sets out to find the Biblical Tree of Life in the hope that its fruit will cure the unicorn who walked in Eden with Eve. Her journey will take her across half the world and into the depths of our soul, where her capacity to love provides her one hope, and her worst peril.
GENRE: Romantic Historical Fantasy
Gwenaella, a convent student in the high middle ages, sets out to find the Biblical Tree of Life in the hope that its fruit will cure the unicorn who walked in Eden with Eve. Her journey will take her across half the world and into the depths of our soul, where her capacity to love provides her one hope, and her worst peril.
Logline Critique Session Three #21
TITLE: THE GHOST WRITER
GENRE: YA Ghost Story
Ever since seventeen-year-old Tessa James moved to Manchester, she's done her damnedest to ignore the rumors of ghosts in the theatre next door, even when letters in a foreign language--and her own handwriting--appear on her nightstand. But then the accidents begin and they're much too similar to the notes to brush off.
GENRE: YA Ghost Story
Ever since seventeen-year-old Tessa James moved to Manchester, she's done her damnedest to ignore the rumors of ghosts in the theatre next door, even when letters in a foreign language--and her own handwriting--appear on her nightstand. But then the accidents begin and they're much too similar to the notes to brush off.
Logline Critique Session Three #20
TITLE: Swap
GENRE: Romantic Comedy
Based on love--artist Raphael and his brother, stand-up comedian, commitment-shy Troy Chariote--swap places in jail, allowing Troy to prove his innocence and Raphael to detox. Whoops, not informing Troy's powerful attorney, Ms. Hai Lo, and Raphael's on-again-off-again fianc�e, head-strong psychologist Stella Riccardi, pull four confused souls into a life-altering, madcap, swap-infested journey to a double wedding finished with a meringue twist.
GENRE: Romantic Comedy
Based on love--artist Raphael and his brother, stand-up comedian, commitment-shy Troy Chariote--swap places in jail, allowing Troy to prove his innocence and Raphael to detox. Whoops, not informing Troy's powerful attorney, Ms. Hai Lo, and Raphael's on-again-off-again fianc�e, head-strong psychologist Stella Riccardi, pull four confused souls into a life-altering, madcap, swap-infested journey to a double wedding finished with a meringue twist.
Logline Critique Session Three #19
TITLE: Out of Time
GENRE: Middle Grade
When thirteen year old Charlie Wells moves onto the North Carolina plantation that's been in his family for 200 years, he thinks his life is over. But, when he and his new friends discover a time machine hidden deep in the woods he realizes it's just getting interesting. By accident they arrive on Charlie's same plantation 150 years in the past. Within minutes one is forced into slavery while another is accused of being a Yankee spy. The two others must set out on foot to find their friends and the key that will take them home, before they're history.
GENRE: Middle Grade
When thirteen year old Charlie Wells moves onto the North Carolina plantation that's been in his family for 200 years, he thinks his life is over. But, when he and his new friends discover a time machine hidden deep in the woods he realizes it's just getting interesting. By accident they arrive on Charlie's same plantation 150 years in the past. Within minutes one is forced into slavery while another is accused of being a Yankee spy. The two others must set out on foot to find their friends and the key that will take them home, before they're history.
Logline Critique Session Three #18
TITLE: Obsidian
GENRE: YA Contemporary Fantasy
Aspen---a skydiving, rock-climbing, bear-cuddling---adrenaline junkie, finds herself in real danger when she unwittingly ensnares the heart of Obsidian, the dragon king.
GENRE: YA Contemporary Fantasy
Aspen---a skydiving, rock-climbing, bear-cuddling---adrenaline junkie, finds herself in real danger when she unwittingly ensnares the heart of Obsidian, the dragon king.
Logline Critique Session Three #17
TITLE: Bound and Broken
GENRE: Paranormal Romance
Psychic and empath, Zoe finds herself soul-bound to a vampire after a life-saving blood exchange. When the Queen of Nightmares shows up looking for revenge, Zoe finds herself danger. Will the newly bound couple survive the wrath of an ancient vampire out for blood?
GENRE: Paranormal Romance
Psychic and empath, Zoe finds herself soul-bound to a vampire after a life-saving blood exchange. When the Queen of Nightmares shows up looking for revenge, Zoe finds herself danger. Will the newly bound couple survive the wrath of an ancient vampire out for blood?
Logline Critique Session Three #16
TITLE: No Other Tart Will Do
GENRE: Historical Romance
In Regency London, a former courtesan who yearns to be a part of her daughter's life must silence the blackmailer to protect her respectable family and prevent her ex-lover from learning she sold their baby to the bride he abandoned. The notorious rake is back after years of spying for the Government, and armed with guilt and his wife's suicide note, he's hunting for his daughter's birthmother to avenge his wife's death.
GENRE: Historical Romance
In Regency London, a former courtesan who yearns to be a part of her daughter's life must silence the blackmailer to protect her respectable family and prevent her ex-lover from learning she sold their baby to the bride he abandoned. The notorious rake is back after years of spying for the Government, and armed with guilt and his wife's suicide note, he's hunting for his daughter's birthmother to avenge his wife's death.
Logline Critique Session Three #15
TITLE: The Legend of Itasca
GENRE: YA Magical Realism
While on vacation, fifteen-year-old Jeni buys a Native American artifact and unintentionally frees a mythical monster. With the week winding down, she must evade her family and overcome her fears so she can vanquish the creature or the death toll will continue - and it's about to become personal.
GENRE: YA Magical Realism
While on vacation, fifteen-year-old Jeni buys a Native American artifact and unintentionally frees a mythical monster. With the week winding down, she must evade her family and overcome her fears so she can vanquish the creature or the death toll will continue - and it's about to become personal.
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