This was fantastic. I'd definitely read more to find out what was in the discarded envelope. I also think it's something that we all can relate to. We don't think we're these horrible people that would go through someone else's mail, but when it's right there in the trash...oh, wait, maybe that's just me. :) Either way, it was great.
...the type WHO'D read... <- I think that reads smoother.
I don't mind this as an opening, and I'm certainly curious enough to keep reading, but I'm really hoping that this letter is majorly important to the plot :) If so, great opening! :)
i like this! gives us the idea that this person is curious, has a sense of humor, and is about to get him/herself into a bit of trouble.
ReplyDeleteI like that we drop right into the character's head. I'd read more.
ReplyDeleteAn intriguing beginning!
ReplyDeleteInteresting enough to want to read more.
ReplyDeleteI never considered myself the type to read another person's mail. In my defense, my roommate did throw the envelope away without even opening it.
ReplyDeleteOooo, what's in that envelope?! I'd definitely read more!
Yup. Hooked here.
ReplyDeleteThis was fantastic. I'd definitely read more to find out what was in the discarded envelope. I also think it's something that we all can relate to. We don't think we're these horrible people that would go through someone else's mail, but when it's right there in the trash...oh, wait, maybe that's just me. :) Either way, it was great.
ReplyDeletei like this and i'd read more. now what's in that envelope? lol
ReplyDeleteSo love this!!!!
ReplyDeleteInteresting set-up with intrigue and solid characterization. I'd definitely read more.
ReplyDelete...the type WHO'D read... <- I think that reads smoother.
ReplyDeleteI don't mind this as an opening, and I'm certainly curious enough to keep reading, but I'm really hoping that this letter is majorly important to the plot :) If so, great opening! :)
Intersting. I'd read on.
ReplyDeleteGreat start. I would definately read more.
ReplyDeleteI'm hooked.
ReplyDeleteThanks for the great response. :-)
ReplyDeleteI'd definitely read this. Already I've got to know what's in that envelope!
ReplyDeleteI agree with gypsywitch about dropping right into the character's head. Love that! :-)
great hook; short but sweat.
ReplyDelete... I meant "sweet", of course.
ReplyDeleteI like! Great voice and situation--I want to know what's the in envelope as well. Nice job. :)
ReplyDelete~Merc