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I like the image in the second sentence, but I'm not sure this is where I'd want to begin reading the story. I'd probably read a few more lines to see if there was anything else to hook me.
I agree with what Tami said, I am immediately sympathetic with the MC. I would read more.
Hooked! Definitely. :-)
Hooked. Love the emotion.
Hooked! I like this one, great imagery!
Lovely. I'm hooked!
Really close to hooked. I'd read more to see where it went.
Pretty hooked. I like the imagery
Almost hooked--I'd want to see more, but it's close.
I loved the imagery, but felt the semi colon was unnecessary. ('and''would have served as well)
I'd keep reading. As others have said, great imagery.
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