Thursday, March 25, 2010

38 Spec Fic

TITLE: Windshifter
GENRE: Speculative Fiction


It was dark-- the dead of night-- and would have been darker if not
for the gas lamps that brightened irregular patches of earth and

15 comments:

  1. Not hooked. Nothing here for me to latch onto (likely what I want is after the 'and' ;-).

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  2. Not hooked--too much like 'it was a dark and stormy night' for my tastes.

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  3. Not hooked. Nothing to connect to.

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  4. Dead of night - seen it before. Not hooked.

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  5. Not hooked. Pretty descriptions, with a slight curiosity pique at the gas lamps, but no character to tie me to.

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  6. The lamps are the only thing that grabbed me at all, and that really wasn't enough. Not hooked, though I'd likely finish the sentence.

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  7. Not hooked -- trying too hard to set atmosphere, IMO.

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  8. It's dark. That's not enough to get me interested in an entire novel. Put your MC into that dark and then I have someone to be interested in.

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  9. Not hooked. Sorry.
    I love the title though! ㋡

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  10. Not hooked--sorry! Atmosphere seems a little forced. (25 words is hard!)

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  11. Sorry - didn't hook me.

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  12. I'd read a little more. I like the description but haven't got a character to care for. I'd decide as soon as someone shows up

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  13. Not hooked. "dead of night" is cliche, and there's too much wordiness. It feels too contradictory without better structure and tightening.

    Shortened and smoothed out (and with knowledge where the sentence is going) and maybe. I like the title.

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