I'll admit -- this was FUN!
Here are my 5 favorites:
#1 -- Amelia and the Other Worlds
I read the query and fell in love. I'm a sucker for parallel words/alternate realities, and this query is so tight that I'm sensing the story arc is tight as well. If I were an agent, I'd have asked for the full immediately.
#2 -- Coveted
This query was a tad on the wordy side, but the potential for a great voice shone through. Also? You had me at "But the Sins have information Caleb is willing to pay any price for: they know what happened to his family." Great stakes.
#4 -- Lost Stars Broken Galaxy
So I love pirates. Beyond that, this is a clear, well written query, and I love that Violet will have to make such a difficult choice. (Did I mention I love pirates?)
#16 -- Moonsilk
This query isn't as tight as it could be; fewer details would help the plot to shine through a little better. Still, I am intrigued by the premise and by the Asian setting for this Rapunzel-like tale. If I were an agent, I'd have asked for the first 3 chapters.
#17 -- Sol of a Gladiator
This query needs a little work. Epic fantasy is likely one of the most difficult genres to distill into a brief, impact-punching query. Despite this, my love for fantasy has won out, and I'm eager to see how this author's writing brings this tale to life. The plot details in the query were clear enough to spark my interest in the main character, and in how he will deal with a conflict unlike any he's yet encountered. In fact, this is probably the sentence that won me over: "For the first time Sol must battle an opponent beyond the reach of his sword..."
And there you have it! WINNERS: Please email me your first 500 words at facelesswords(at)gmail.com. I will post your excerpts on Monday for public critique.