TITLE: Adult
GENRE: Secret
“Great. I needed this like I needed a hole in the head,” Jordan groaned. Although given her present situation, probably not the best choice of words.
“Hey Princess! Are you deaf?” the demanding voice growled. But she simple sat there unmoved and continued to drink her double caff venti macchiato – or whatever the mortal called it.
Her cell went off with an incoming text. It read: D kindly requests your presence back at home.
Of course she does. Jordan sighed and stood up to leave. Grabbing her coat, she began to walk towards the door.
“I’m sorry, but am I interrupting something?” the brute snapped again, impatiently.
The cell dinged again and Jordan groaned. She lifted the phone and read: Immediately if not sooner!
With a deafening bang and a loud scream from everyone else in the restaurant, Jordan saw her impatient cell shot to pieces out of her hand.
Urban fantasy. The comment about "the mortal" is what does it for me. If it weren't for that one word, I might have gone with Thriller.
ReplyDeleteUrban Fantasy
ReplyDelete"her double caff venti macchiato – or whatever the mortal called it."
Urban fantasy
ReplyDeletePrincess, mortal, macchiato, and cell phone.
Urban fantasy
ReplyDeletemortal
Urban fantasy. But that hinges on a single word, "mortal."
ReplyDeleteSuppose it could also turn into horror. Or paranormal romance. :)
Urban Fantasy
ReplyDeleteOnly because of the word "mortal." Maybe paranormal.
Urban fantasy
ReplyDeleteUrban Fantasy
ReplyDeleteThe use of the word Mortal.
Fantasy
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Fantasy -- also because of the word 'mortal'.
ReplyDeleteUrban Fantasy.
ReplyDeleteMortal says the MC is not, so it's an alternate world. I could go with paranormal romance.
Fantasy.
ReplyDeleteCalling a human a mortal as if she is something else like immortal, the impatient cell, as if it has a mind of it's own, speak of fantasy.
Fantasy, but confusing. Who's the brute who shows up in the middle? Good luck, Sarah
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ReplyDeleteMortal
Urban Fantasy
ReplyDeleteOnly non-humans call people mortals.
Fantasy. Mortal was the clue.
ReplyDeleteFantasy. Mortal gave it away. I was pretty confused reading this, however.
ReplyDeleteFantasy--
ReplyDeletePerhaps Urban Fantasy. The term 'mortal' gives it away :)
Urban Fantasy.
ReplyDeleteUrban because of the coffee shop. Fantasy because the MC ordered with help from a "mortal."
Urban fantasy, but I'm a little baffled about what's happening. Non-mortal getting a text, but not knowing what the drink she ordered is called, seems a little out of whack. It looks like the coffee shop is getting held up and she's ignoring the robber, but I can't really tell.
ReplyDeleteFantasy - mortal.
ReplyDeleteAlso confused. I think you need to slow the scene down a bit. There's too much bouncing back and forth between the text bothering her and the person in the coffee shop bothering her for the reader to get grounded in the world.
URBAN FANTASY or THRILLER
ReplyDeleteI'm getting mixed signals. Referring to "mortals" makes me think she isn't so this must be some kind of fantasy and since the setting is modern, I go with UF.
But then somebody shoots her cell phone and that sounds more like a thriller. I guess there could be gunplay in UF, but I'm still confused.
URBAN FANTASY
ReplyDelete"Princess" did it. "Mortal" confirmed.
I'm having trouble following this, though. It's difficult to tell whether the demanding voice and the brute are the same (and I have no idea who they are or what they're doing). Combine that with the fact that Jordan could also be a guy's name (and so I didn't immediately recognize that "she" was the same as Jordan), and I got really confused.
Fantasy. This is interesting but confusing.
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ReplyDeleteModern coffee and cell phones but the character is implied as not a mortal.
Urban Fantasy
ReplyDeleteThe 'mortal' did it.
Urban fantasy.
ReplyDeleteI think you meant "she simply sat there."
Urban fantasy.
ReplyDeleteDefinitely modern setting (cell phones, double caff venti macchiato) but the reference to 'the mortal' suggests fantasy.
My Submission is indeed Urban Fantasy.
ReplyDeleteAnd yes, for those of you who guessed, Jordan is an immortal. So a mortal trying to intimidate her is a laughable annoyance - one she would really like to swat.
For those that were confused by the quick pace, my appologies. 150 words is not enough for a full explanation of what was going on.