A loud thud echoed into the galley as I walked into the doorjamb, followed by and equally loud whistle from Tiki. "Hottie!" she squawked. "Hottie, Lexi, hottie."
"Shut up," I snarled at Tiki, who was doing a rather enthusiastic dance on my shoulder. I rubbed my forehead. Yeah I had to agree with her, but this was neither the time nor the place to announce it. There I was, standing in a ratty t-shirt and frumpy shorts wearing the last thing I wanted to be caught dead in, looking like an idiot for walking into a solid metal beam.
Nicco's and Dag's eyes were locked onto us in an instant. Dag's mouth curled into a grin and he raised a brow. "Toot – toot."
Tiki ruffled her feathers and stretched her neck out, screeching at the top of her birdie-lungs, "bad girls, talking bout bad girls…" She wolf whistled and bounced up and down. "Beep – beep."
"Shut up, Tiki."
There was no stopping her. She was on a roll and I knew for certain, Nicco would never let me live this down. Worse yet, Dag looked amused. Way too amused.
"Hottie! Toot – toot, beep – beep."
"Zip it, Red." I lowered my voice and warned Tiki. "I'll stuff you like a banquet bird and serve your giblets in gravy."
"What a remarkable bird." Dag rose to his feet and my breath caught in my throat. Oh boy.
Feet glued to the floor and a brain that ceased to function about a beep-beep ago, I knew I was in trouble. Tiki had understated the hottie part a bit. He stole the breath from my lungs and my heart all at once. Oh yeah, what hot-blooded female wouldn't go into meltdown at the sight of him? Tiki certainly had.
Okay, I'm a little confused by all the names, since I'm jumping into the middle of the story, but yeah, I'm getting the embarrassment!
ReplyDeleteI'm with Rose, a little confused, but I do think the embarrassment comes through. I like the bird, and this line:
ReplyDeleteFeet glued to the floor and a brain that ceased to function about a beep-beep ago...
Beep-beep ago. Loved that. I think though, the last para sort of took the humor away, because it was a bit too much and the bird was just being annoying then. I think the bird did it's job, and maybe that last para was just a bit too much, if that makes sense.
This beginning didn't work for me. Like the others I was confused and had to reread the beginning a few times.
ReplyDeleteLiked the bird though. His personality shined through the most.
Not sure you can use the words to the song even if a parrot sings them. They are copyrighted and I was once told I couldn't use any part of the a popular song unless I obtain copyright permission.
LOL.
ReplyDeleteI get attraction as well as embarrassment. ;) Very fun, Dawn.
~Merc
Yes, I feel the embarrassment as well as the "wow is this guy hot" thing.
ReplyDeleteI was also a little confused at the names and the circumstances, but I'm sure that has a lot to do with being dropped into the middle of the scene.