Stina, I thought the same, and won't be entering. But will definitely be critiquing to help out. My personal favorite, however, might b:
"This is the first sentence of my fabulous novel."
I feel it's a little distancing and doesn't convey the impact that a more direct first sentence might have. I don't think I'd finish the rest of the paragraph but with a little tweaking, there might be something there.
Perhaps changing the word 'fabulous' (never a great word for depth of characterization, in my opinion) to the more dramatic 'fantastic' would help?
Grin. Glad I wasn't the only one clicking refresh from 9am until the starting gun post went up. I thought it was just because I was a firstie to the site.
word verification (I don't usually do this, but it was a cool word) "dishomme" The stereotypical French attitude towards the rest of mankind
Never before have I sat by my computer clicking reload waiting for a new post to appear. Luckily no one saw me. How fun!
ReplyDeleteLOL I was a little late this morning, Amy. Sorry! ;P
ReplyDeleteOh the temptation to enter. I've changed a single word since I entered it in the Jan SA contest.
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But. I. Must. Fight. The temptation. And let someone else enjoy the excitement of the crit.
Stina,
ReplyDeleteI thought the same, and won't be entering. But will definitely be critiquing to help out. My personal favorite, however, might b:
"This is the first sentence of my fabulous novel."
I feel it's a little distancing and doesn't convey the impact that a more direct first sentence might have. I don't think I'd finish the rest of the paragraph but with a little tweaking, there might be something there.
Perhaps changing the word 'fabulous' (never a great word for depth of characterization, in my opinion) to the more dramatic 'fantastic' would help?
Grin. Glad I wasn't the only one clicking refresh from 9am until the starting gun post went up. I thought it was just because I was a firstie to the site.
ReplyDeleteword verification (I don't usually do this, but it was a cool word)
"dishomme" The stereotypical French attitude towards the rest of mankind
Peter, I can't stop laughing at your comment. *wipe tears from eyes*.
ReplyDeleteCan't wait to crit the real first sentences tomorrow.