You're not going to hurt anyone's feelings.
Both excerpts are from a novel's first few paragraphs; a classic "Are You Hooked?", as it were. Read them, decide whether they "work" for you and why.
Is the writing good enough to pull you in? Is there a "hook"? If so, what is it? If not, do you want to read on anyway? Why or why not?
Each one is written by a different author. I'll give credit later.
Okay, go for it! I'm ever so eager to read your critiques.