TITLE: Windcaller
GENRE: Adult Fantasy
A woman of the noble caste acquires illicit powers and takes on a secret identity in order to bring rain to the starving peoples of the Aridlands. She finds herself falling in love with a proud man of the oppressed caste, but revealing her true identity would destroy any hope of her quest succeeding.
You've got great structure here, but it feels awkward to leave your main character's name out of the pitch.
ReplyDeleteI really like this, but I think it's missing, what... emotion? Maybe adding a name, as suggested above, would make me feel more personally invested, although I already want to read it!
ReplyDeleteLove the title but I'm not drawn to the pitch. I need something that pulls me out of the common fantasy plot line.
ReplyDeleteI have to agree that with this short of a pitch, quest stories can sound alike. If you change it to something like "Noble X wants to use her illicit powers to bring rain to the Aridlands, but falls in love with proud Y of a different caste," that could leave you room to add what is truly unique about your story.
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