Wednesday, August 24, 2016

Logline Critique Round #5

TITLE: Middledom
GENRE: MG Fantasy

When Princess Violet, pushed out of the limelight by her more glamorous sisters, overhears a Fairy Godmother declaring middle princesses tend to fade out of the story, she sets about to do something famously heroic to keep from dwindling away.

3 comments:

  1. This is cute, but we need more specifics especially about the "dwindling away" and why she must avoid this. Also, is there a timeline (does she have to do this before something else happens to make her dwindle)?

    Good luck!
    Holly

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  2. I love the premise! Think it would read more easily if broken into 2 sentences/thoughts.

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  3. Great title! What's the famously heroic something? And what/who will try to stop her? Will her sisters help or hinder? Is the dwindling like a curse? Does she turn small like a fairy? Also, will she have a greater arc then "I'm important too!" What does she learn on her quest? Sounds intriguing. Cheers!

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