Tuesday, June 22, 2010

25 Words #33

TITLE: A CAKE I WILL BAKE
GENRE: picture book

A cake I will bake and you will see,
It will be tall and lovely, just like me.

11 comments:

  1. Sounds delicious.
    Hooked!

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  2. I want to see how tall this cake gets!

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  3. oooh, I love this, especially if the cake gets huge!

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  4. If the cake gtes huge, then I think this is fine. If it's just going to be a regular size cake, you might reconsider.

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  5. So far, I love it. It has a great starting rhythm for a picture book. Also, I’m partial to stories about cakes. Tee-hee. I write about them at every opportunity, so this would hook me.

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  6. I love this. Fun and visual even without the illustrations.

    Makes me wonder if cupcakes are involved as well :)

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  7. Love the image. The only thing that bothered me is I stumbled over the "It will" for some reason. Like the second setence was just one beat too long.

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  8. I've heard rhyming picture books are difficult to do, but I think this is really charming and I like it! The only thing is I also tripped over "it will be." I think the rhythm was a little different than the first line.

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  9. Sounds fun! Wish I could see the pictures.

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