Miss Snark's First Victim
Very cute! I love the idea. As a mother myself, though, I was expecting a little more amusement/surprise/adoration from the mother at this question. Something more like, "Oh! Well, I guess I am."
I smiled when I read this. Very nice.
Cute! 'nuff said.
Nope. Sorry to disagree, but Mommies are Queens!I also wanted a pause from Mom.
I agree with Amanda about expecting more of a reaction from the mother. It sounds like she may be preoccupied with something (which is maybe what you were going for).But this is really just adorable. :)
LOVE your title!
I like this start. I'd read more.
Cute beginning!A few suggestions:"Mommy, are you a princess?" Johnny asks [COMMA NEEDED] coming into the kitchen."Then I am your knight,"... I would change to "Then I'm your knight,"People usually talk in contractions, not whole words.Good luck!
It mght be stronger if he simply announces to Mom that's she a princess and he's her knight.By starting with the question, the focus falls on what her answer will be, rather than staying on Johnny, the Knight. If she says no, Johnny's crushed. If she says yes, the next question is why? What makes her a princess? Kids know their moms aren't prncesses and they'll wonder why this mom is.If he just says Mom is a princess and he is a knight, it's automatically assumed he's pretending.
Sure, it would be cute if a kid said that, but ... I hate to be the lone dissenter, but the opening seems a little too cute for a pb. Who is the intended audience? If it's preschoolers, I'm not sure they want to read about some other kid being adorable. They'd rather experience the adventure from the main character's perspective.
It's cute. I do hope that the child is the main character though. Kids want to read about kids, not grown ups. Grown ups can be in the story, but kids must be the problem solvers.
I like this, and I always love children's stories where boys are the main character--hard to find!I might use some more action oriented words like "running through" instead of "coming into", as boys often do. And, instead of Mommy replies, I might have her do something too, like "smiles", so we know she is just playing along.Cute.
Love this. My five year old girl does this kind of thing all the time. But, yes, she's more inclined to simply tell me that she is a princess, and therefore I am a king.I do hope the mommy plays along a bit (dubbing him, or something). So many picture books have children playing alone. They always make me a little sad.
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