Tuesday, June 22, 2010

25 Words #18

TITLE: JANE EYRE, BEWARE
GENRE: YA

I have to get into Columbia University or else, but my psychologist says my sticky brain could keep me out.

6 comments:

  1. I have no idea what a 'sticky brain' is but I love it!

    If your story is going to parallel Jane Eyre then I feel you may lose me quickly. But if your whole story keeps this voice, I may stick around a little longer.

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  2. THis is a little awkward for me. I would rework the sentence, maybe break it up?

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  3. I LOVE the title. I also like the voice and would definitely keep reading.

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  4. I like the title. The 'or else' was distracting to me. I wanted to know 'or else what?' But you didn't go there. You went on to the sticky brain, which is also intriguing and probably more relevant to the plot. Perhaps cut the 'or else' for now and bring it up later?

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  5. Intriguing. I want to know what a sticky brain is. I also like the title--but I agree with Vincent ; I hope it's alluding to Jane Eyre, and not a mashup.

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  6. Interesting...I'd drop the university after Columbia.

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