TITLE: Never Say Never
GENRE: YA Romance
FOOLISH HEARTS meets GREEK MYTHOLOGY in NEVER SAY NEVER, this YA romantic comedy with a fantasy twist. As Brynn navigates her parents divorce and the romantic entanglements of her friends, she discovers the annoying friend trying to set her up on dates is Aphrodite in disguise. But avoiding Aphrodite’s prodding has tripped Brynn into a bad situation. She’s falling in love...with the one boy who could end one of her closest friendships.
This sounds super fun! The only thing I would suggest is if there is any way to give us something more specific about the boy or the friendship? Ex- is the boy someone her best friend has a crush on, or something so we can get a concrete image of the stakes of that friendship in our heads.ReplyDelete
Sounds like a fun twist of comedy. The comps are great. The only thing that made me pause was the last sentence. Maybe because I had no clear idea on who the closest friend was?. The stakes did not seem as high as the fun image of Byrnn prodded into a calamity of odd dates, unless perhaps the closest friend is Aphrodite or a rival, that adds to the twist. I would consider naming the closest friend. I would read this. Good luck!ReplyDelete
First of all, I would remove the word "comedy". If this is funny, show it in your writing, not in a claim.ReplyDelete
Aside from that, I think we need a more tangible goal here. I can't see the end of navigating a divorce since this honestly doesn't end until both parents are dead. What does she actually try to achieve in this book?
Agree with all that this sounds fun, but the pitch doesn't quite hit the mark. I might suggest removing the last two sentences, ending with her learning that her friend is aphrodite. Or if not, playing with the sentences after that to better convey what she's looking for and why she can't get it.ReplyDelete