Thursday, March 29, 2018

10TH BIRTHDAY BLOGPITCH #42: YA Contemporary

TITLE: The Third Strike
GENRE: YA Contemporary

Faking Normal meets Exit, Pursued by a Bear.

Alex has played baseball since 2nd grade. When she makes the high school boys team, team captain Connor sneers. --- Strike 1.

Connor assaults her. --- Strike 2.

Alex doesn’t believe she’s strong enough to testify in court. Then she learns she’s not his first victim. --- Strike 3.


  1. I don't really have any suggestions. It sounds pretty awesome to me. I would read it.

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  3. Interesting structure, I like the relevance to the story. Seems timely, also: a girl who plays baseball, also someone standing up for herself against a 'boys club.' I'm hooked.

    Just a thought, when she learns she's not his first victim, that would be a strike against him, not her, like the first two statements. Maybe the last statement is a ball? Like it's an opportunity to try again?

  4. This sounds interesting! Please send the query, synopsis and first two chapters to Thanks!

    -Nicole Payne, Literary Agent at Golden Wheat

  5. Sounds awesome! Please send the query letter and manuscript to And include Birthday Blog Pitch in the subject line. Thanks!

  6. Oh this sounds really cool! I’d love to see the first 50 pages + a synopsis. You can upload everything via QueryManager:

    Moe Ferrara
    BookEnds Literary

  7. I honestly don't think the tone of this pitch matches the tone of your story. This comes off as light but it's about assault so it shouldn't sound light at all. I also think it would be stronger if you told us more about what happens.


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