TITLE: DANCE, DANCE, DIE!
GENRE: YA Paranormal Suspense
A compelling modern take on HCA’s “The Red Shoes”: Living with dyspraxia, fifteen-year-old Annora fights a daily battle against her own body. Blunders and bruises are the norm until new red shoes transform her from klutz to swan—just in time for Homecoming. Now that her parkour crush thinks Annora’s an urban ninja too, she keeps wearing the grace-granting shoes to hide her disorder, but a vengeful ghost is using them to gradually possess her.
Very cool-sounding premise! Will you send your query + first 3 chaps my way to consider?
ReplyDeleteCongratulations! Please email me at facelesswords(at)gmail.com for Joan's address.
DeleteThis manuscript sounds great. Just the right amount of awesome creepiness!!!
ReplyDeleteI agree with Ammi. And, congratulations!
ReplyDeleteLove this premise and the spotlight image of red shoes. Clever and possibly creepy. I would want to read this.
ReplyDeleteI don't think this reads very paranormal since the only paranormal element is a ghost at the very end. Maybe explain how she gets the shoes (esp if they're from the ghost). I think this would better set the tone of the pitch.
ReplyDeleteI also don't think the swan metaphor is working for you here. Swan makes me think ballet (so does grace), not ninja. Try something that better works with the character. If she's trying to impress the guy by seeming more coordinated and better at marital arts (for example), then she'd want strength and agility and precision, not swan and grace.
Good luck!
Holly
Paranormal is not typically my genre, but this intrigues me! Feels unique and I love me a vengeful ghost. Hooked!
ReplyDeleteOh this sounds really cool! I’d love to see the first 50 pages + a synopsis. You can upload everything via QueryManager: QueryMe.online/1005/ABBlogpitch
ReplyDeleteMoe Ferrara
BookEnds Literary
So much yes! Please query me with the first three chapters. Click my name for a link!
ReplyDeleteWoah, wow! What a premise! Only comment I have is that I'd like to know about the potential possession sooner, but that may just be me being nit-picky! Good job! :)
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