Tuesday, October 16, 2012

Logline Critique Round Three #18

TITLE: Princess of Swans
GENRE: YA Fantasy

To save her war-torn country, sheltered, disfigured princess Feyana Belmaron must journey deep into hostile territory to find--and court--a ruthless enemy prince.

10 comments:

  1. Love the idea of a disfigured princess and having to court a prince. Nice and simple logline too!

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  2. I like this; simple and to the point. And a disfigured princess is very appealing!

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  3. Perfectly to the point. I like this.

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  4. I like this one. Good job.

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  5. I like this short but compelling. Nice job characterizing the protag. Maybe a tiny more about the opposition, and why a disfigured princess might become convinced to take on such a quest?

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  6. Love the idea. This is a great logline.

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  7. It would help if you told us why she has to do this now as well as what will happen if she fails.

    Good luck!
    Holly

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  8. I love this one, too. Concise and tells us what we need to know. Wish I could get mine this short!

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  9. Would definitely read this one!

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