To save her war-torn country, sheltered, disfigured princess Feyana Belmaron must journey deep into hostile territory to find--and court--a ruthless enemy prince.
I like this short but compelling. Nice job characterizing the protag. Maybe a tiny more about the opposition, and why a disfigured princess might become convinced to take on such a quest?
Love the idea of a disfigured princess and having to court a prince. Nice and simple logline too!
ReplyDeleteI like this; simple and to the point. And a disfigured princess is very appealing!
ReplyDeletePerfectly to the point. I like this.
ReplyDeleteI like this one. Good job.
ReplyDeleteI like this short but compelling. Nice job characterizing the protag. Maybe a tiny more about the opposition, and why a disfigured princess might become convinced to take on such a quest?
ReplyDeleteLove the idea. This is a great logline.
ReplyDeleteIt would help if you told us why she has to do this now as well as what will happen if she fails.
ReplyDeleteGood luck!
Holly
I love this one, too. Concise and tells us what we need to know. Wish I could get mine this short!
ReplyDeleteWould definitely read this one!
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