TITLE: Blame it on Meryl Streep
GENRE: Women's fiction
At age 28 Laura Sanders has never had been in a relationship, never had sex, never been loved. She feels like an invisible woman. But when she watches the movie Mamma Mia, the perfect mentor to a happier, more self-confident life suddenly appears at her side: Meryl Streep. Nobody but Laura can see and hear imaginary Meryl, but so what? Sometimes you have to lose yourself in a fantasy to fix your reality.
I love the premise of an adult with an imaginary friend who helps her find her way to the live she's never had the confidence to live.ReplyDelete
I am not sure about the legality of her new mentor actually being Meryl Streep. Same with mentioning Mamma Mia.
Laura Sanders has never had the confidence she needed to live life to the fullest, but, an imaginary friend inspired by a movie helps her navigate her way to the life she always wanted.
I love this premise. It sounds endearing and hilarious. I don't think there would be any legal issues using Meryl Streep or mentioning Mama Mia, as long as you don't quote any actual lines from the movie OR ABBA song lyrics. Song lyrics will land you in deep you-know-what.ReplyDelete
The only thing that would make it better to me would be to work on your economy of words. If you say the same things but clean it up a little, it will really pop!
I love the premise too! I think you can shorten the beginning and keep the punchy end. Something like:ReplyDelete
At age 28 Laura Sanders has never  been loved.  But when she watches...
This sounds like a fun story, and I love "but so what? Sometimes you have to lose yourself in a fantasy to fix your reality."ReplyDelete
In the opening sentence "...has never had been..." should probably be "...has never been...".
I like the premise of this one. I also really like your logline, it has a lot of voice. However, there's something about the first 2 sentences that's bugging me. It's a bit clunky.ReplyDelete
What about something like: "At age 28 Laura Sanders feels like an invisible woman: she can't even catch a guy's eye, let alone his his heart. But when..."
Just a thought.
I would also be worried about legalities of having a fictional Meryl Streep in your book?ReplyDelete
You can have people in books - look at the Odd Thomas series.ReplyDelete
I agree about the lyrics in a book being horrible legally speaking, other than that, I think with some streamlining, this could really stand out:)
I agree you might tighten in spots, but I love the premise, and the last line is great. Makes me want to dive right in to the story.ReplyDelete
I love how different this is. It seems funny too.ReplyDelete
I think you could combine and simplify the first two sentences into one.
Thank you all so much for your feedback! Some suggestions are really great and I will definitely work on tightening the beginning.ReplyDelete
Sorry for the grammar mistake/typo in the first sentence and thanks, David, for pointing it out!
As for the legal issue ... according to an IP lawyer using Mamma Mia is fine, using Meryl Streep is a grey area, but apparently nothing to worry about unless I portray her in a wrongful, mean way, which I don’t. The only thing that's tricky is using her name in the title, but that’s easy to change, I think.
Good luck to all of you!
I loved this log line. You could call it Blame it on the Actress or the Movie Star or something. Would still be fun.ReplyDelete
How about 'Blame it on Meryl'?ReplyDelete
"Blame it on Meryl" actually was my initial title. :-) Then I changed it to get more interest. If I ever get an agent AND a publisher I'll leave it up to them to decide and deal with the legal issues.ReplyDelete
Thanks again for all your feedback!! This is so helpful!
I enjoyed it and would definitely read. Sounds like a great story!ReplyDelete
I think it is enough to say that she has never been in a relationship. The not having sex/not being in love part is kinda implied by this.ReplyDelete
Aside from that, you have an interesting setup but don't give us very much about the plot. Will this imaginary Meryl help her find love? Who or what will stop this from happening?
i was hooked at the title and think the premise is great! sounds fun and like a feel-good read.ReplyDelete
Love it. I would read this book. In the interest of brevity, the logline could easily be cut. "Never been in a relationship, never had sex, never been loved. She feels...invisible" is about 3 times redundant."ReplyDelete