Thursday, March 29, 2018

10TH BIRTHDAY BLOGPITCH #42: YA Contemporary

TITLE: The Third Strike
GENRE: YA Contemporary

Faking Normal meets Exit, Pursued by a Bear.

Alex has played baseball since 2nd grade. When she makes the high school boys team, team captain Connor sneers. --- Strike 1.

Connor assaults her. --- Strike 2.

Alex doesn’t believe she’s strong enough to testify in court. Then she learns she’s not his first victim. --- Strike 3.

10 comments:

  1. I don't really have any suggestions. It sounds pretty awesome to me. I would read it.

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  3. Interesting structure, I like the relevance to the story. Seems timely, also: a girl who plays baseball, also someone standing up for herself against a 'boys club.' I'm hooked.

    Just a thought, when she learns she's not his first victim, that would be a strike against him, not her, like the first two statements. Maybe the last statement is a ball? Like it's an opportunity to try again?

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  4. This sounds interesting! Please send the query, synopsis and first two chapters to nicole@goldenwheatliterary.com. Thanks!

    -Nicole Payne, Literary Agent at Golden Wheat

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  5. Sounds awesome! Please send the query letter and manuscript to queries@ldlainc.com. And include Birthday Blog Pitch in the subject line. Thanks!

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  6. Oh this sounds really cool! I’d love to see the first 50 pages + a synopsis. You can upload everything via QueryManager: QueryMe.online/1005/ABBlogpitch

    Moe Ferrara
    BookEnds Literary

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  7. I honestly don't think the tone of this pitch matches the tone of your story. This comes off as light but it's about assault so it shouldn't sound light at all. I also think it would be stronger if you told us more about what happens.

    Holly

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