Wednesday, December 3, 2008

F2S 60

I got dressed for my first date in 16 years at the same time my ex-husband was across town passing a kidney stone. Divine justice.

28 comments:

  1. Sounds like chick lit, another genre that's not my forte, but I think the hook is interesting and I would at least read more.

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  2. How fun - I like it. I'd keep reading.

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  3. OMG that's FUNNY!

    I would so read on.

    :) Terri

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  4. I laughed out loud. I want more!

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  5. I would read on. I like the voice and am interested in both characters already.

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  6. Absolutely!!!
    I would read on.

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  7. Not my thing, but I like this. Nice hook. :]

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  8. Love! It feels fresh. I like chick-lit in small doses of non-clichéd text, but this one gives me a good feeling.

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  9. Fun and hooking.

    The first sentence is a little too long. I'd prefer a few words cut, like:

    "My first date in 16 years and my ex was busy passing a kidney stone."

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  10. Awww, snap. I like it and want to keep reading, even though it's not my genre.

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  11. This IS my genre and I like this. I might take out the 'across town' part though... who cares where the rotten scoundrel is now? :)

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  12. Chick Lit is not my choice, ever--but what a great voice.

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  13. Very fun and engaging. (and such divine justice indeed LOL)

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  14. Ha! Not my genre, so I wouldn't read on. But that is a great opener.

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  15. LOL! I'd have to read on. The POV character already has my attention. :-)

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  16. oh very funny! I'd read on just to see this characters take on things.

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  17. Not sure I'm hooked. It feels like there's two POVs going on here, or at least an omniscient POV, but neither serve to really draw me in.

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  18. Lovely humour. Would definitely read more.

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  19. HAHAHA! I love it. The wry humor is great. I would keep reading. As long as the narrator doesn’t turn completely vindictive and bitchy, I’d be fine. Very nice.

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  20. Too funny! My favorite entry.

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  21. I don't read chick lit, but this seems on target for that genre. Nice job.

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  22. This sounds familiar.

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  23. Ha! Love the voice, very funny. I agree that you could do without the ex's whereabouts.

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