Miss Snark's First Victim
Not hooked. Way to cliche in the first line.
It's not bad writing, and I wouldn't shut the book just after those words, but maybe the simile is a little much? There are so many stories that begin with chaos and police lights, what's the single sharp detail that makes this one stand out?
Sorry... I'm not hooked yet. I just am not that crazy about the "like a lighthouse to a lost sailor".
I agree, I don't like the first sentence
Not hooked, mainly because of the lighthouse simile. Red flashing lights make for a vivid enough scene without inserting a totally different picture into things.
I think people aren't liking the cliche approach because the two sentences really can be made shorter and more dramatic.***** raced towards the flashing red lights. You really don't need anything else to draw you into the story. Like a newspaper headline. It's a raw punchy way to say "Man Bites Dog"
Not hooked, sorry.
I kinda liked the lighthouse simile.
The mention of red lights and sailors had me thinking something a bit different. Ahem. Based on this, I'm not hooked, but of course I wouldn't normally dismiss a piece after only reading 25 words.