Thursday, March 25, 2010

168 SF

TITLE: The Ost Ring
GENRE: Science Fiction

Ezra hadn't meant to stare.

17 comments:

  1. I get the impression this would need more than 25 words to get started. *laughs* I'd keep reading at this point to see what he hadn't meant to stare at.

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  2. Well, for five words it's doing it's job.

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  3. Agreed with former comments - at 5 words, I'd keep reading!

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  4. I'd like to find out what he's staring at. It's too bad we don't have a full 25 words here.

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  5. Not enough info.

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  6. I'd keep reading - but I'm dying to see your second sentence, which apparently runs more than 20 words!

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  7. Don't like the name. Based on only these 5 words, I'd say not hooked

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  8. Not much to go on. Not crazy about the name Ezra, but I could be persuaded if he has a dynamic personality.

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  9. I'm curious to know what Ezra stared at, but not full out hooked with so little to go on.

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  10. A lot would depend on what Ezra was starting at ... and what would happen to him because he was staring.

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  11. Little hooked, but it's not enough.

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  12. Maybe hooked. I'd read the next sentence.

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  13. I'll keep reading. I'm certainly wondering what Ezra was staring at and why the staring is a bad choice.

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  14. Almost hooked--I like the line (and the name) but want just a tiny bit more to draw me in. Probably leaning in favor of hooked, though. :)

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  15. Doesn't grab me in itself, but I would read one more sentence to see what she's staring at. This format is hard on your opeing :-)

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