Miss Snark's First Victim
I like the image in the second sentence, but I'm not sure this is where I'd want to begin reading the story. I'd probably read a few more lines to see if there was anything else to hook me.
I agree with what Tami said, I am immediately sympathetic with the MC. I would read more.
Hooked! Definitely. :-)
Hooked. Love the emotion.
Hooked! I like this one, great imagery!
Lovely. I'm hooked!
Hooked. More!!
Really close to hooked. I'd read more to see where it went.
Pretty hooked. I like the imagery
Almost hooked--I'd want to see more, but it's close.
I loved the imagery, but felt the semi colon was unnecessary. ('and''would have served as well)
I'd keep reading. As others have said, great imagery.
I like the image in the second sentence, but I'm not sure this is where I'd want to begin reading the story. I'd probably read a few more lines to see if there was anything else to hook me.
ReplyDeleteI agree with what Tami said, I am immediately sympathetic with the MC. I would read more.
ReplyDeleteHooked! Definitely. :-)
ReplyDeleteHooked. Love the emotion.
ReplyDeleteHooked! I like this one, great imagery!
ReplyDeleteLovely. I'm hooked!
ReplyDeleteHooked. More!!
ReplyDeleteReally close to hooked. I'd read more to see where it went.
ReplyDeletePretty hooked. I like the imagery
ReplyDeleteAlmost hooked--I'd want to see more, but it's close.
ReplyDeleteI loved the imagery, but felt the semi colon was unnecessary. ('and''would have served as well)
ReplyDeleteI'd keep reading. As others have said, great imagery.
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