Miss Snark's First Victim
Not...really hooked. Kind of weirded out.
Ha! I love this. I'd definitely keep reading.
spooky, but slimy...would probably read on for a page or two until totally grossed out
Could go either way. I do think you have some great details here in a few words, and they are both telling and creepy. If that's what you are going for, it works.
the '...bare buttocks...' did nothing for me, but the rest of the sentence made me sit up.Hooked
Um...huh? Not hooked.
not feeling it at all
i laughed at the word davenport. i'm confused. if this is supposed to be a cheeky (no pun intended) robert- downey- jr- as- sherlock- holmes type of mystery it could work. if not, the voice is awkward.
Funny. I'm curious.
Mildly cringe-worthy, but stirring my curiousity. I'd give it a few pages.
Hooked. I'd read on, just to find out why he's nude.
Bare butt on a murderer's couch? Too odd.
well, I'm not sure. This could maybe be too weird, or it might be hilarious, depending on what comes next.
I'm a little freaked out by it...I'd have to read a bit more to see if I was going to read on. :)
??? First, I thought of bistro for Lustro (maybe I've read too many 25 word beginnings) and then I can't tell if he's sitting or not, alive or dead. Too much confusion for 25 words. Sorry!
Hooked. My first reaction was eeeew, but I loved your choice of names. (I'm guessing Brinkerhoff is a name, and I liked Lustro, too) I din't know if you're going for campy humor or mystery/suspense, but I'm willing to go along for the ride.
Eeeeewwww!Not really hooked. A naked guy named Lustro? I'm just hoping it is BROWN leather.
This opening didn't work for me. It's kinda yukked me out.
Uh... not really, no.
Wow. I would read on, you bet!
While I'm intrigued at why he would be there, I'm not really hooked by this. I might read a little further, but not a lot unless something grabbed me.