Miss Snark's First Victim
Well done! I'm hooked.
This is just my thing. Love it!
Love it! Hook for humor and a good, strong MC voice.
Ouch. Hard on Mom. Moderately hooked.
Hooked also! Great job!
A little unsure with this one, though not for any reason I can really speak to. I would definitely give it another paragraph or so, since I like the writer's voice.
GRINS. I read this too fast and thought you had "but I was born with a pitchfork in mine". I do like the first sentence and am hooked by that alone. Even if the pitchfork was in the hand instead of the mouth.
catchy, I'm in
Congrats! Hooked despite cliche.
Hehe. Yeah, hooked.
Got me chuckling right off the bat. Hooked.
Hah! Yes, hooked.
I like it. Suggestion - get rid of the but and make the first sentence into two. I think this would make it stronger
Right now it's a guarded hooked.I would prefer a more wry comment such as: 'I considered this to be a problem', because it is purely subjective whether the MC's status is or isn't a problem.