Thursday, March 25, 2010

175 YA Fantasy

TITLE: Erin Asunder
GENRE: YA Fantasy


Death was only another beginning.

I knew about the agony of mortal wounds--acid, fire, bleeding--and the anguish of soul and flesh torn asunder.

30 comments:

  1. Hooked (and that was before I saw the title and knew who posted it). How does a YA MC know all these things, I wondered.

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  2. It reads a bit like a pastiche to me. I think it's the combination of agony, anguish and asunder.

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  3. I really love the belief that Death is only another beginning. Beautiful. I love it! I'm hooked!

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  4. I recognize this one. And yep, I'm hooked.

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  5. I too recognized it. And while i love the sentiment, I'm pretty sure I've read something very close to that first line before.
    In Harry Potter, I believe- after Sirius dies, the ghost says almost that exact thing, or maybe Dumbledore says it. Anwyay, I think i'd skip it and go to the second more original sentence.

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  6. I like the idea of death as a new beginning but "only another" seems awkward to me.

    Would read a bit more to see what was going on.

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  7. Even if I hadn't recognized it, I would be hooked. :)

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  8. I thought it was a little overwritten, but I was hooked by the implications.

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  9. This is very compelling. Nice!

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  10. Depending on the summary of the book on the cover-flap, I might or might not keep going. You've neither hooked me nor scared me off. I'd probably give you until the end of the paragraph to get me.

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  11. Hooked. I've read this before, but I was hooked then too so it still counts.

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  12. Hmmm... not sure I'd keep reading..not what I like to read.. It sounds overly dramatic to me..

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  13. I really like this voice. There is something about the three words inside the em-dashes that throws me off. They don't sound like mortal wounds. Maybe this is explained later...

    I'd read on.

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  14. Semi-hooked....

    I think I read the first line and fidgetted a little bit, because it's been said before.

    But I like the next line... in that it makes me wonder why the character suffered that torture.

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  15. I really liked the 1st sentence and the idea that death can be a beginning. I'm not sure about the dashes though. I'd read on.

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  16. HOOKED!
    Fantastic opening sentence! ㋡

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  17. I recognize it and am hooked.

    (Although I will always hear "Death is only the beginning" in... blast, who says it escapes me. You know, the first Mummy movie. ;) I may like that movie too much...)

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  18. Hooked, though by the second sentence and not so much the first, as I've seen beginnings like the first sentence before.

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  19. Nicely lyrical pain. Love the voice. Not sure it's something I would read, but you've got me checking it out for sure.

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  20. This is good, but I saw quite a bit entries with the theme of death being unimportant, cheated etc.

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  21. I recognized it, but I am hooked. I love the way you work the title into the first few lines :)

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  22. Love the title! Thought the first line was a bit cliche but altogether I'm hooked...I'd read it because of the title actually.

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  23. Sounds interesting. I'd read it.

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